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A sequel to "May and Ben", Ben unknowingly has his mother for breakfast as a joke on their part. What happens when he finds out and gets his friend involved?
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Posted by dickraymond 11 years ago Report
This is actually very good! You should definitely keep this story going!
Posted by vaatidorf6000 11 years ago Report
Thank you.
Posted by dickraymond 11 years ago Report
Ben definitely needs to eat more people. Maybe he's in a club or sports team he can snack on?
Posted by vaatidorf6000 11 years ago Report
Hmm...that sounds like a good idea.
Posted by dickraymond 11 years ago Report
If I could impart any lessons, though, it's that you aren't nearly detailed enough in writing the actual vore. Take more time, describe more of the process, use descriptive language and imagery. Paint a word picture, if you will.
Posted by crushxtreame 8 years ago Report
this really needs a sequel dude