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Lightning Dust is sick of Rainbow Dash criticizing her plans and ideas, so she has her a rainbow meal.
This is my first story of hopefully a two part story.
This is my first actual upload, yay! Any tips or criticism are welcome, I'm trying to improve after all. Also, most of the stories I post will be short, but I may upload a long one at some point.
Any suggestions for future stories are welcome!
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Posted by cynderdragoness101 10 years ago Report
Very nice loved it.
Posted by YourGenericBrony 10 years ago Report
Thanks, glad you loved it!
Posted by Bliss 10 years ago Report
it was pretty good, though I think you could have stretched out the actually swallowing part a bit more.
Posted by YourGenericBrony 10 years ago Report
Yeah, I'm going to extend the swallowing in part two
Posted by Dinokid11 6 years ago Report
When you doing the next chapter