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If you are reading this then you have stumbled upon my first written story on this website.
Whether I will continue upon this or not, I am not sure. Although I do have plans to possibly continue it. I will let you decide if this is the beginning of something beautiful or of something that is just not meant to see the light of day.
Also, as I have said, this is my first story so any tips or criticism any of you guys can give me will be greatly appreciated. Thanks.
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Posted by Alhazred 10 years ago Report
Ladies and gentlemen, I've just realised that I have made a pretty bad mistake with a line in one of the paragraphs concerning the fall of the dragon species which is near the middle of the story.
The line says, "but it did not stop the once mighty race from losing their intelligence and will to survive" when it should actually say something like, "but it did not stop the once mighty race from retaining their intelligence and will to survive" I am very sorry for this horrendous mistake and I do not know how I missed it until now. Please forgive me for my blunder.
Posted by 100154 10 years ago Report
Nice story! ;D
Posted by Alhazred 10 years ago Report
Thank you kindly.
Posted by cero89 10 years ago Report
This is just fantastic.. You pulled it off really well
Posted by Alhazred 9 years ago Report
Much obliged, I would not have thought that this would've been on the level of fantastic, but I'm glad that it is to someone.
Posted by joeburp22181 9 years ago Report
Awesome story, will described and told, so maternal. And all with a fun and sexual tone to boot.
Posted by Alhazred 9 years ago Report
Wow, thank you very much for the positive comment, it means a lot.
Posted by DresdenQ 9 years ago Report
excellent, very good prose and concept, can;t wait for more
Posted by Alhazred 9 years ago Report
Thank you Dresden. I'll do my best to get more out. Might be while though....just saying....
Posted by devildog423 9 years ago Report
Great work all around!
Now for my full thoughts on your work. *ahem*
The setup was pretty standard,
(guy gets lost and meets a dragon)
But its not a bad setup.
The characters are nice,
(The knight didn't get much back story, but that was because he was too weak to talk much.)
The Dragoness was likable due to her kindness.
(Kind dragons are always a plus in my book.)
All in all a good story hope you continue it.
P.S. This story is kinda like my idea for a story that I'm working on, thanks for the addition inspiration.
Posted by Alhazred 9 years ago Report
I gave someone inspiration?....this is new to me, but I am glad I did all the same.
Anyway, I do have an idea to continue the story. Problem is that it might end up being all talk and no action. Having less sexual content as the story progresses and more memory delving. I will see about expanding the knight's backstory some more however.
But anyway, thank you for the nice comment and the feedback, it's appreciated. I want to wish you luck in your own story as well. I would also advice that if you want true inspiration then all you have to do is look to the Emperor's light and he will guide you.
Good luck.