Well.. I always like a wrong gender story.
It's not a bad story, It's a great start but the pacing feels off and the switches could've been better.
The largest complaint I have is that it feels incomplete, Toothless has her rider inside her and it ends. There is much to explore in terms of emotions, bonding, reaction.
The story is too short and too fast, take your time with the character(s).
It has potential but it's up to you to get that story on paper. Good luck
Posted by Dark_phoenix 9 years ago Report
Well.. I always like a wrong gender story.
It's not a bad story, It's a great start but the pacing feels off and the switches could've been better.
The largest complaint I have is that it feels incomplete, Toothless has her rider inside her and it ends. There is much to explore in terms of emotions, bonding, reaction.
The story is too short and too fast, take your time with the character(s).
It has potential but it's up to you to get that story on paper. Good luck
Posted by MMPluc 9 years ago Report
A thousand view, yeah