Posted by thatv0refreak 9 years ago Report

Awww...what a fun and sad journey to come to a end so quickly :(

Posted by ChaoskampfNunc 9 years ago Report

I imagine dashie looks like rainbow colored soup right about now, must look nice

Posted by thorondraco 9 years ago Report

so she was masturbating for like five hours or something?
sighs

Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report

Well... vore's are pretty perverted. So, yeah, prolly.. XD

Posted by thorondraco 9 years ago Report

well, least dashie would ahve asphyxiated before it got painful. especially if she was rubbing herself out like that.

Posted by silverspec 9 years ago Report

And so Dash fulfills her only fruitful role in life.

Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report

Alas, no more Dashie. Gilda's gonna be like, "WHAT!!! She promised to be MY prey!" Super Kami Guru voice, "THAAAAAAT SLUUUUUUUT!!"

;D

Posted by dousernamesmatter 9 years ago Report

Well, vore has no logic, so why can't Rainbow Dash be revived just to be digested again by Gilda?

Posted by ViperBits 9 years ago Report

As several people have already said, this happened a bit too sudden and fast compared to the pace of the rest of the comic... Having an extra page showing Dash's moans and movements slowly fading as her form is distorting would have been real nice. Alas, it is still rather good as it is, so whatever.

Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report

He is just starting out writing comic-type scripts. I didn't learn everything overnight either, after all. Pacing, characterization, scripting; those all develop in time when mental effort is properly applied with a fair amount of self-critique as well. Tone-wise, at least, this was consistent, which already elevated it over quite a few movies I could mention! (coughstrwarsprequelscough)

Posted by ViperBits 9 years ago Report

I know, and it is a good thing. I already told that overall it was good, so yeah.

While what you said is true, I believe that critique and external input are also important things. I don't know if he plans to do any more comics in the future, but hopefully after reading this, the next time he gets to digestion part he will at least consider making it a bit more fluid and gradual.

That's what critique is for, right? Hard to spot all mistakes and know what the audience wants if everyone keeps silent.

Posted by DoesNotExist 9 years ago Report

I did sort of deliberately skip over the digestion, I liked the idea of her looking down and being a little surprised. That being said, I did plan to put "much later" on this page... And then forgot to do it until I'd posted >.<