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A girlfriend tries some kinkier stuff for her boyfriend. It doesn't really pan out.
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Posted by joeburp22181 8 years ago Report
Lol that was hot and mean and sexy.
Posted by Softvorelover 8 years ago Report
Thanks. That was the goal:)
Posted by Diamonte 8 years ago Report
Good, but needs proper paragraph breaks.
Posted by Softvorelover 8 years ago Report
I appreciate the critique. Could you elaborate. I can't remember where to indent and what not.
Posted by Diamonte 8 years ago Report
Make a new paragraph every time you change who is speaking, or you change the point of view, or you change who is doing the action.
Posted by Softvorelover 8 years ago Report
That's what I thought but since I wasn't a 100% on it it was half added. But thank you for confirming:)
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
I know it’s been five years since you wrote these. But should you ever write more, I’m here for it! Love these succinct and direct little vore snippets. They’re thrilling! You have a knack for it.
Posted by Softvorelover 3 years ago Report
Thank you????. That means a lot coming from you. I'd like to write some new ones so maybe soon????.
Posted by Softvorelover 3 years ago Report
Sorry the ? Marks were supposed to be emojis:,-)
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
Hey! I appreciate that! And thanks for clarifying. Lol. A ton of question marks does weird things to textual tone.
Give your ideas life!