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Sascha is beautiful, charming, and in the prime of her life, but her secret desire is to be eaten alive by another human being. You are in the world’s weirdest sex club to help her achieve that dream. Why? Who is this mysterious woman?
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Posted by ryanshowseason3 8 years ago Report
Well done. Not my cup of tea at points. But it's well executed.
You deserve at least one comment telling you "good job"
Posted by JacquesMarzipan 8 years ago Report
Thank you! I spent a long time working on this, so it's lovely to get good feedback.
If you don't mind me asking, which parts in particular didn't you like? I'm always looking to improve.
Posted by ryanshowseason3 8 years ago Report
Certain things that are down to preference really. Nothing inherently wrong on your part. The snake and dismemberment thing just isn't my bag and I felt Val was a necessarily weak character but it's the plot at work, there was no avoiding it. Also I wasn't sure if the twins were turned into cum, I think they were.
Posted by JacquesMarzipan 8 years ago Report
Yeah, I deliberately didn't go into detail with Val since I didn't think it was necessary. I never thought about the twins being cumformed, but if that thought came to you while reading it then that's fine; I deliberately wrote some parts in a vague way to stimulate the reader's imagination to fill in the blanks, so it's good to hear that it worked. Thanks again!