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There you go. Tried to make it not so terribly creepy as far as young sexual content with still putting some interesting stuff in there. Not sure which side of that line I ended up on, but hopefully it was entertaining at least.
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Posted by Chaos 7 years ago Report
Pretty good story.
Posted by Delirious 7 years ago Report
I love it read the outher ones please continue this story
Posted by Scrumptious 7 years ago Report
Wow... yeah...
I was riveted, but at the same time creeped out. Anything to do with children is such a taboo, that it hits a lot of moral buttons. Perhaps that's what you were aiming at, in which case: you certainly hit your target.
While I think you wrote it very well, I think it's advisable for you to keep away from this sort of thing. I say that because in my geographic area (NW US) there has been a huge crack down on things involving children. One fellow I (kind of) know is facing the rest of his lifetime in jail for having the wrong sort of .jpgs on his hard drive, and I just heard that a former co-worker of mine got busted for solicitation. Your legal environs might be different, but the internet is global, and who knows what you might face. If you want to push envelopes, be sure that you keep your identity and IP address very secure.
In regards to the continuing story, I could see the protagonist being disturbed by this episode as he learns more about what this means. He's clearly a teenaged boy who is also coming to terms with his own sexuality (as is Lilian, though younger and a girl). It's the sort of confusion a lot of people go through, which turns (hopefully) into learning moments. From a drama angle, this can really be something that radically helps flesh out the characters and make them more interesting going forward.
Posted by callumarie 7 years ago Report
Sequel please! This story's awesome!
Posted by jonathan1501 6 years ago Report
Pretty good story, when will the next one be out?
Posted by Ray1700 5 years ago Report
Any chance for another chapter?