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Naomi starts experiencing some changes to her body, and her psyche, as she tries to come to terms with what she's becoming
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Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
They struggled for a week? Sounds like she was swallowing air for them and they were eating and drinking whatever she'd consumed with them.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Yeah, I'm not a fan of rapid digestion, plus I wrote this roughly 3-5 years ago, I can't remember exactly lol.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Perhaps they're not even digesting, and instead shrinking, ending up stuck inside her somewhere?
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Unfortunately no, I'm not a fan of that either, so from my perspective that's not the case, but whatever conclusions you draw for yourself are by all means fair!
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Darn, it's real hard to find other non-fatal vore fans.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
See, I'm not exactly a fan of fatal vore either, I don't go into depth in the digestion process or anything, more often than not I'll simply state that they were eaten, and didn't get out. I suppose I like writing vore in a more realistic manner.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Well, you could go with a non-fatal aspect of some sort. There's some good non-fatal vore content out there. Probably not mine though, I'm not a very good author. Marloweeny has some great content, some with bulges others with no bulges.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
I might at some point! I am a fan of pretty graphic subject matter, from a mental standpoint mostly, and a little bit physical. You'll certainly see what I mean in the chapters to come of this series. But at some point I could totally see myself writing non fatal stories as one offs or whatnot!
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
So I guess for now it's just implied digestion. The real question is when are people going to notice or when are the police going to show up for obvious reasons?
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
For that, you will have to wait and see my friend.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
That and the child prey is why I hope it goes non-fatal.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Yeah I admit, I'm not proud about the child prey part, but again, it ties in with the realism preference I have. And sorry in adavance, but this series will not end up being non fatal, I was referring to other stories unrelated to this series in the future. Sorry but to each their own I guess eh?
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Gotta say, I love that "realism" bit.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Yeah sorry man.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
No, actually I think it's funny you say realism, when the children survived a week without air, let alone were swallowed in the first place.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Oh, my bad, yeah, I know lol, realism to an extent I should say!
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
I wouldn't mind the fatal portion as much if the prey weren't children, even less if the prey were say wanted criminals or people who are corrupt or evil. My whole thing is that vore involves the innocent, and especially children, I prefer it to be non-fatal.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Just letting you know how I feel about it, not trying to persuade you otherwise. I'll continue to read too, until or unless the digestion becomes less implied and more shown.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
Yeah I totally get and respect that, I waver with how I view it on a irregular basis. I do presume though, that those concepts may have played a part in Naomi's creation. I always write her to feel guilty and remorseful about what she's doing. And I appreciate that! I'll let you know though, that the most I intend to show it is that the characters begin to gain weight after a period of time.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
It's good that she at least feels guilty, it's just, you know, even though they're the most minor of characters, I just wish there'd be a happy ending for her unintended, or in this chapter's case her unfortunate victims.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
yeah, I'm trying to convey kind of a darker setting in the world I'm writing. There aren't going to be too many happy endings, for the prey, or the predators.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
I can definitely see why the prey wouldn't, as for the preds, probably jail time, execution, suicide from guilt, or essentially becoming a feral animal.
Posted by JustSomePrey 7 years ago Report
Those are my guesses, but I'll stop taking up your comment section. However, if you'd like to continue the discussion, we could in the PM I sent you earlier.
Posted by KieshaMetsouki 7 years ago Report
sure thing!