Posted by DontTellMyWife 7 years ago Report

This is so exciting - I didn't expect to see a new story from you, it's been so long!

Worth the wait, Mona has been missed and as for Carla...even though it was suggested in previous I didn't think she would go through with it. I liked the way it was casually revealed, I would like to know the details of the moment when she disappeared down her throat.

So the title will be passed on...much like Carla.

There are a few formatting errors in the story, they don't really affect the reading of the story, just some gaps in words.

Great work. Glad you're writing again.

Posted by aliwantstobeeaten 7 years ago Report

Carla is gone! Oh my god!!!!!!

I know she made the pact with Mona in the prequels but jeez I'm stunned. I guess the IVC title will not be defended. How will it be explained to the other competitors if Mona is keeping it a secret?

Very devious of you to sneak that bombshell in there.

I loved the story. Looking forward to reading what Erin does next.

A real treat to start 2018 thanks!

Posted by josiesshrinkkink 7 years ago Report

What an amazing story but...OMFG!!!! Mona ate Carla!!!!! I can't believe it. I actually cried.

So now we finally know if she would go through with it.

I love the IVC so much - please write more. You're good!!!

Posted by Fetishist 7 years ago Report

Looks like Carla won't be retaining her title as IVC champion.

I enjoyed the story but the revelation overshadowed the rest of the plot so in the end Jed's fate seemed insignificant.

I hope you will write a story which describes Carla's final moments more explicitly, her character deserves a bigger exit (in more ways than one) rather than being written out 'off screen' in dialogue with another character.

That's not intended as a criticism of the story or your writing, I just would like more of Carla before she's flushed down Mona's toilet forever.

It would also be good to know Mona's feelings in the immediate aftermath and how it affects her. She was more subdued in this story.

Erin is an exciting creation and Lauren is interesting. How can you run a vore restaurant and not eat the patrons?

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

Ah, this was good! There's something strangely nice about the idea of amiable customer service in vore. Being efficiently pleasant and respectful to the prey... before gulping him down, and then treating him simply as food to be digested. Mona is a lot of fun, as always.

Revealing only indirectly the answer to the big Carla question was a good idea, I think. We see the other characters already moving on. Poor Mona, though. That was selfish on Carla's part. As Ged sees here, beneath her brash and casual exterior, Mona obviously has normal human feelings, and Carla must have known it might be traumatic for her friend.

At least it didn't turn Mona off vore. ;)

And so we have a new contender for the championship! Do you know what Erin's family name is?

Posted by bedfordsb 7 years ago Report

Thanks FS! Pleased you liked it, and it does deal with the Carla situatiuon quite well. Must admit I was trying to get this done before your next IVC story appeared in case you might want to feature Erin, and I'd certainly delighted if she was part of the next competiton. How about Gipton for a family name? It's a hopefully uncommon name

Posted by French_snack 7 years ago Report

I forgot to say: I enjoyed seeing how Mona has gone from a rather casual waitress to manageress of Sydney's vore restaurant. And having to tighten up her fitness regimen for professional purposes. While still being very much the Mona that we know!

OK for Erin Gipton. Who, it appears, is not above a touch of ruthlessness now that she's got her life on track! Talk about a way of breaking with the past...

Posted by Mouthplayer 7 years ago Report

That was tremendous. I always enjoy Mona and she didn't disappoint as usual.

It was a real delight to see a new story from you, just in time for the upcoming IVC final. Thank you to both you and French Snack for keeping this wonderful series going.

Although you have a slightly different tone and style to your writing, the way you set the scene and present the characters is a joy.

As for the plotline - what can I say? The outcome of Mona and Carla's relationship was understated in the context of the arc but no less powerful. I would like to think that there is a prequel in the pipeline which covers the conclusion of this odd couple pairing. Carla's journey may have ended but her story feels incomplete.

Mona's interaction with Jed was riotous, the sassy voress we have come to love but showing a rare moment of vulnerability.

And finally Erin, damaged, hard and capable of looking after herself, the IVC better watch out - there's a new girl in town!

Keep up the outstanding work.

Posted by bedfordsb 7 years ago Report

Many thanks to everyone who has taken the time to comment on my latest - really encouraging to hear your views and thoughts. Pleased people liked the new instalment

Posted by Eccentrichousewife 7 years ago Report

So we now know for sure whether Carla would actually do it. I hope she enjoyed it but poor Mona - she must be heartbroken.

Great story - Mona is great fun and Erin will be a fantastic addition to the IVC cast.

Do you have any plans to write the story of Carla's final destination?

Posted by Noodleboy 7 years ago Report

Another sensational instalment of the IVC saga and a valuable update on events before the final.

Goodbye Carla, you will be missed. What will Mona do now that her best mate is gone? She seems a little sad.

Will there be a retrospective story about Mona eating Carla? I hope so.

Posted by Ladybellylover 7 years ago Report

What a nice surprise to find a brand new IVC story, and a superb one as well.

I'm sure I'm not alone when I say that you're contribution to the series is greatly appreciated by us IVC fans. It's been a while.

I loved the Delicious Diner, and the customer service seems to be exceptional, shame that most of the users don't stay around to give ratings.

Reading a story with Mona is always a pleasure, despite this episode being tinged with sadness.

If you decide to write another story about Carla's wish being fulfilled, I would absolutely thrilled.

I hope you write more soon, your stories are too good to stay unwritten!

Posted by passingthroughyou 7 years ago Report

Brilliant. You and French Snack never fail to deliver an entertaining tale about the IVC.

And amongst the fun and sexiness, we had a rare moment of pathos. Wow. Carla did it. We had been dying to find out and then...how will Mona live with that? There are plenty of stories about unwilling prey but an unwilling pred is very unusual. I enjoyed their little double act but now she's all alone :(

The Delicious Diner is a very clever name, a lesson about subtle word play that the Vore Restaurant in London should take note of. Lol.

Please write more of these, it's been a long time since your last one and I had assumed that you had turned your back on it so it was a very nice surprise to see new material from you.

It would be good to know how the pact was finalized in more detail. I hope you don't mind me saying that I don't think you should discard Carla just yet.

A fine effort!

Posted by lazylayjay 7 years ago Report

That is quite a development!

Did I miss a story before this one where Mona eats Carla?