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Tired of Celestia’s pony utopia, Twilight’s power finally goes to her head as she decides to try to conquer Ponyville. She just needs a little help to get her started.
I wrote this four years ago. I tried my hand at character development. Compared to my other fics, this might leave you walking away feeling good. Maybe.
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Posted by SleepySleepy 6 years ago Report
"Twilight groggily woke up in her library, alone. She glanced at a poster of King Sombra on her wall. She tried to imagine what it was like to enslave an empire."
Wow, that escalated quickly.
In all seriousness, this is pretty good. It was fun to see a story with some plot in it. This was especially so in some very real suspense in that I had no idea at all if twilight were to live or not after she enraged "the dragon". Only real complaint is that some parts felt rushed or even glossed over. The biggest example of this is at the end, where twilight's and "the dragon"'s death-sex ended up summarized in all of two sentences.
(Now I've gotta figure out what part to fap to... this really is a lot of story to be packed down into a single document, and this is not something that I ever imagined myself pondering, haha.)
Posted by Zpothu 6 years ago Report
Happy to know you liked it overall. I couldn’t tell you what people usually masturbate to, but your choices are lyra’s death, trixie’s death, derpy’s death, Twilight Sparkle’s almost death, Zecora’s death, or any of the sacrificial deaths.
The main reason I gloss over Twilight and the dragon’s death is because they “make love” and I kind of toss my hands up in the air at the idea of illustrating that. You know I haven’t had a girlfriend in ten years? It’s not easy being an introverted super deviant.
Posted by SleepySleepy 6 years ago Report
Not sure what you're talking about, I'm a virgin and I have no problems envisioning sex.
As for my choice, I decided upon the scene of them eating Derpy and making a mess of her blood.
Posted by Zpothu 6 years ago Report
yeah, I guess if we're taking this seriously, I could have written up something. I've had sex three times before.
and good, that's probably the best choice