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Joe and Donovan, two of the local university's most notorious dudebros and womanizers, are pressed to figure out dinner. Simple of mind and tastes, the two voracious frat boys decide to fall back on an old favorite. Delivery boy, with a side of pizza.
Unbeknownst to them, a certain donkey is pulling a late night shift for some extra dough, and he's never been one to suffer fools, or idiotic preds, gladly.
Fun Fact: The "Preds eat delivery boy" trope is so old, I think it may have been included in the first carvings of the "Epic of Gilgamesh." So I decided to have some fun with this one, and put a nice little twist on a classic setup.
I hope you folks enjoy, because I sure as hell do in this one~
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Posted by ChaoskampfNunc 7 years ago Report
Wow, I really, really enjoyed this a lot! The description of his enormous, sweaty ass descending down in particular was fantastic~
Posted by Bianchi 7 years ago Report
Many thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it~
Posted by ChaoskampfNunc 7 years ago Report
Hehe really makes you wonder what it'd be like to be trapped between those mountainous mounds as he goes about his day~
Posted by ApertureScience 7 years ago Report
hehe.... epic of gilgamesh... good one
Posted by Bianchi 7 years ago Report
Making the Sumerians proud. ^^
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 7 years ago Report
I don't know why, but that "dear reader" moment made me think of Bianchi and his creator meeting... not in any particular detail, just had the oddest thought of a fourth-wall break by the donkey. I know that their the same name now, but still...
Anyway, I love the story, its good to read a story that has preds you don't like getting gobbled by one you do. I kinda wish their had been a nod to the husky getting turned on by Bianchi though, his bro did say he seems to like being submissive...
Posted by Bianchi 7 years ago Report
P.G Wodehouse (one of my favorite authors), was fond of using the phrase “Dear reader” in his fiction from time to time, and this was the first chance I’ve had to use it in my own. I’m rather delighted it had an impact on you. ^^
Also, there are subtle—perhaps too subtle—nods sprinkled here or there that the husky enjoys servecing me. ^^
Posted by VoraciousSincerity 7 years ago Report
It isn't often that minor touches like that get that kinda of strong and far-reaching reaction from me, but it is interesting to add it, I don't see many writers do that these days in fiction.
I guess they must've been subtle, I assume the part about him being overwhelmed by Bianchi's smell might've been one, but I'm not really good with implications that don't escalate. If they're too distant from their point I don't get it unless it's pointed out. Personal flaw from being too straightforward of a person I guess.
Posted by mark1701 7 years ago Report
This is so great, and your writing style is fantastic!
Posted by Bianchi 7 years ago Report
Many thanks! I appreciate that.