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So a couple of months back I asked Miranda (http://aryion.com/g4/user/miranda_dragon ) if I could maybe write one of her awesome characters, after some discussion we decided on Cindy and this was the result.

Would love to hear peoples thoughts as it took a while this one.

Edit, ignore the notes at the bottom, in my haste I forgot to get rid of them before upload.

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Slimshod

Posted by Slimshod 6 years ago Report

Aside from a few grammatical errors here and there this was great. It read very close to what MD has in her collection so it fits nicely among her stories. I liked the difference in attitude/personality compared to her other characters. You did a good job setting her tone though I would have liked to get more of a feel for her.

MrPhoton

Posted by MrPhoton 6 years ago Report

Glad you liked it, shame about the errors as I ran it through a checker, guess it didn't catch them all. Glad it feels tonal to Miranda's works too.