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The life of an adventurer is dangerous and its not for everyone, there are oh so meny things just waiting to put an inexperienced traveler on the menu and not everything is as it seems, as one would be adventurer learn to her misfortune.
So I've decided to try my hand at a little vore writing and this is my first story, I'm always looking for critique to help me improve.
Happy vore day all
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Posted by hunter2045 6 years ago Report
Breaking up the text into paragraphs would go a long way towards making this more readable.
Otherwise, nice job.