bag of devouring
Khana slunk along the back alley behind the tavern, her prize held tightly under her arm her head quickly turning from side to side to make sure no one was there before she took a closer look at the satchel in her hands, it was a rather nice bag, with it's blue and red pattern making the impression of a face if you looked at it right, she might be able to get a fine price just for the bag itself even if they didn't recognize it for what it was and Khana most certainly knew what it was, a Bag of Holding, and that made it all the more valuable, she could take a few things from inside and leave the bag on the side of the road, providing she could guess what the owner kept in it, if the worst came to the worst she could just pawn off the bag itself and pretend she didn’t know what it was and get a fine price for it. Khana flipped open the top of the satchel and looked into the oddly dark interior trying to think of what might have been inside the bag, gold seemed like the obvious choice, maybe even platinum, a grin broke out across her face as she reached into the bag, a small amount of focus and a bit of luck was all it took for the bag to give up its contents, without another moment of hesitation she plunged her hand into the bag feeling around until after a few seconds her hand grasped around a few coins at the same time she felt a strong tug at her arm, Khana tried to pull back to no avail as her arm was pulled in up to to the shoulder then slowly the bag began creeping over her head and neck, as her other hand came up to try and pull the bag off her, which only let the bag swallow her left hand as well, her struggling seemed useless as the bag crept over her head Khana began to scream trying to alert the guards or bystanders or hell even the adventurer she had stolen from, anyone who could help her out of this predicament, the bag continued its progression along her shoulders undisturbed by the thrashing of its prey, by this point khana had shouted herself hoarse she felt a small tongue like protrusion along the inside of the bag slurping across her skin, it was tasting her, with this knowledge she redubled her struggles “please let me go, I’m sorry, I just want to get out of here” her screams for mercy got no response other then the bag to slip slightly farther down her chest and stomach little razor like teeth began to shred her clothes and the tongue slid across her breasts to be immediately flowed by a long slurp as the bag tried to get as much of her into itself as it could, tears where running down Khanas face as her body slowly slid deeper and deeper into the bag she’d lost all her fight now all she wanted was for it to end as the bag slid dow to her waist its tongue wasting no time in slurping along her legs licking all the way down till with one last slurp her feet entered the mouth of the bag and it closed, Khanas last bit of freedom cut off.
Khana waited surrounded by the tight fleshy walls until her hands came to an opening, her body slid smoothly into a much larger chamber, with a small splash she landed in a small pool of an unknown substance, she took a look around her and saw piles of gold and silver, strewn across the floor where miscellaneous items. weapons and armor here and there, still feeling slightly cautious Khana began her walk around the strange room looking up at the entrance hole she had come through her first priority was to find a way to get up to it, after she had figured that out she could grab a few pieces of gold and leave this nightmare behind her, a small pain in her ankle caught Khana’s attention, the strange liquid was rising fast, Khana scrambled as fast as she could up one of the piles of treasure her heart starting to race again, a few gold coins fell off the pile into the acid below and few drops splashed onto her unprotected leg leaving a burn mark, Khana winced in pain and glanced around none of the piles were any larger than the one she was standing on, she looked back up at the hole in the ceiling trying to figure out how she could reach it and all the while the acid kept on rising higher and higher reaching her ankles, burning Khana and continuing to rise, Khana reached up ignoring the pain in her legs, her outstretched hand brushed ageanst the slippery surface of the ceiling her fingers just out of reach of the little hole, her one way out, the level of the acid was now at her knees, the pain was excruciating with a small scream Khanas legs gave out and she fell backwards into the acid going under immediately, with the last of her strangth Khana reached up from the ever growing pool her hand once again just scraping the edge of the hole her finger nails scrabbling against it to no avail, with that last effort Khana whent back under the acid running into her eyes and mouth as she screamed until darkness took her.
Linder walked over to the unassuming satchel laying on the ground, he picked it up took a deep breath, and reached his hand inside, after a few minutes of groping his hand came back out holding a bleached humanoid skull, Linder took a glance at the object let out a heavy sigh and put it back, he’d have to find a place to leave the bones where no one would notice but it was better than actually having his possessions stolen, with that he hefted the bag onto his back and set off down the street, not another thought given to the poor fool who just couldn’t keep their hands to themselves
Posted by nervousvampire 4 years ago Report
It's a good idea and rather well written, but despite it's short length it seems, off, a bit slow. Like the vore scene doesn't have the weight it should. Some more descriptors might help.
I'm not trying to be rude, so if I do seem rude I apologize
Posted by Chaosborn 4 years ago Report
thanks for your comment this advice was very helpful