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Suika is one of my favorite 2hus, so I had to make a story for her. I think I did this one a little better than my first...
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Finished on September 6 2018
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Posted by Nyusha 6 years ago Report
Truth be told I think his story is better than mine > w>
Posted by Pickyfanboy 6 years ago Report
But I prefer the outcome of yours
Posted by ItsSongxing 6 years ago Report
Bruh.
Posted by Pickyfanboy 6 years ago Report
What? I'm complementing this story via comparison
Posted by Nyusha 6 years ago Report
It's ok! Please refrain from comparing my stuff to other's work though- we're different people, so we're gonna have different tastes! (^_−)☆
Posted by Pickyfanboy 6 years ago Report
Ok, fine.
Posted by ItsSongxing 6 years ago Report
That, and the fact that it was not just any old comparison, but a comparison that intentionally derides a 3rd party's work simply because they didn't write the pred/prey roles you like. You gotta stop, dude. I won't be making another comment after this lest we completely swarm pzu here, but I'll say this much:
You told me back on my Miko story that this became a sort of in-joke that you took too far. When even you admit that you took something too far, that's a point where you have to stop taking it anywhere. Keep it an in-joke. It's not cute, nor endearing, nor funny. It's just pissing off creators that're making the content they like; not only that, but you're shit-talking people on other peoples' comment sections. That's no good, unless your goal is to be an arse.
Posted by Pickyfanboy 6 years ago Report
I did say in the last comment that I'd stop didn't I? I get it, Prior to joining this site, most of the people whose work I commented on were close friends, so stuff like this wasn't taken so seriously. That combined with my short temper doesn't make for a good combination. I really just need to learn when to just not say anything. Please be patient.
Posted by Twisty22 6 years ago Report
For what it's worth, I thought your comment was funny. Like, and I'm just being honest, I couldn't possibly care how you thought that story should have ended, especially because it was written for someone else, but I didn't take offense or anything.
Just keep on being you brah. It's not hurting anyone
Posted by Pickyfanboy 6 years ago Report
Finally. I actually intended for that to be a joke
Posted by Twisty22 6 years ago Report
Once again, I really like the disposal. Reimu being resigned to her fate was weirdly cute, and you captured Suika being a jerk about it pretty adorably.
I guess if I had to give an overall criticism it's that you're a bit scant on detail in a lot of spots. Stuff goes from A to B to C really quickly and it makes it hard to take it in, I guess? That can be a difficult aspect of fet writing, especially if it's sections you don't much care for compared to those you like. Either way, that was fun, and you're writing exactly the kind of content I enjoy. I look forward to more stuff!
Posted by Nyusha 6 years ago Report
Thanks! I think so too. I think I gotta figure it out a little more. d(>_･ )
Posted by Mortaven 6 years ago Report
-w- Niiice, really like how ya portrayed Suika, one of my favorites, and I never get to see her as a pred >w> Or in vore that goes this far.
Posted by Nyusha 6 years ago Report
Suika is my favorite touhou! She works so well as a pred with her growing stuff. Also her playful attitude makes it really fun to write.
Posted by Mortaven 6 years ago Report
ezactly! -w- lil (GIANT) playful drunk loli...ehehehe.