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Fluttershy and Bailey are in the foul grasp of Gnarle, a remnant of a bygone age, who just so happens to like pony flesh. the cruel monster toys with her a bit before leaving her to marinate in her own fear.
Proof-read by Nebbie
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Posted by PonyThroat 6 years ago Report
Geeze, Gnarle is one dude that I do not like
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
aye he's not a very pleasant individual to put it lightly. the doctor's evaluation from his reference pic puts it perfectly.
"He has a penchant for acts of extreme violence and has a personality bordering on hard-line sadistic”.
next chapter he is going to get even worse, as Fluttershy has escaped and he has been cheated from dining on her luscious flesh.
Posted by PonyThroat 6 years ago Report
Here’s hoping to rose heart
Posted by Nebbie 6 years ago Report
I recommend the form "proofread" over "proof read", since the latter actually can mean something else (proof as in a mathematical proof).
You forgot to mess with the phrase "implying how he viewed creators to his wellbeing". There's a few tiny things as well that I apparently missed, a missing comma on "well Redheart" and an extra linebreak early in. Other than that, just a bit of the usual issues near the end where you redid things.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
thanks again Nebbie. the creators to his well-being means how he views them, and to him they are little more then food or objects.
changed the proof read to proof read. :)
Posted by Nebbie 6 years ago Report
It's a grammar issue, I think it should be "implying how he viewed creators as tools for his own well-being".
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
i think i corrected it to something that more easily conveys the meaning i was going for. just uploaded it with a few Little tweaks.
Posted by Nebbie 6 years ago Report
Seems the same currently.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
if you have ad blockers the ekas doesn't update until you delete the cookies, its a pain in the ass. as the story is saved as a cookie, but it has been changed.
Posted by Nebbie 6 years ago Report
That is...interesting. The only adblock I'm using doesn't report blocking anything, so not sure what went wrong.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
its a cookie issue, i had the same experience with my first re-upload when i re-proofread some of my older stuff. deleting the cookies solves it.
Posted by joshfang96 6 years ago Report
Dang, and I was hoping they would make a flawless escape. But at lest one got out safely.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
question is now will Ratway get a hat-trick or are we going to see a body count rise. ;)
Posted by joshfang96 6 years ago Report
Well judging by the looks of things with Bailey in a vary critical state I'll say: Their croc turds.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
logical outcome, question is what shades of fur are going to be tickling the trolls arse when he shits out a technicolor shit.
Posted by joshfang96 6 years ago Report
If I have to guess either over Fluttershy or Bailey
(which, a possible chance that Fluttershy might come back.But then again she's might be long gone by now)Then my guess would be Baily.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
surprises are to be had. :) lets just say at least one pony is getting ate.
Posted by joshfang96 6 years ago Report
Ah..I see, well this will be surprising then.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
it should be up some time in November, not sure when yet as i am starting a new job and i am unsure of the exact hours and how much it will knacker me, but i have the draft planned, so it is in my wip list.
Posted by joshfang96 6 years ago Report
Awesome, I'll be looking forward to seeing how ratway be getting out of this crappy mess.
And good luck on your new job .:)
Posted by Philosoraptor 6 years ago Report
Some great stuff here. Never cared for the MLP ponies somehow swallowing other ponies their same size, but it was easy enough to ignore that part. The story became far more interesting when Gnarle entered the picture... he certainly would be able to swallow ponies whole. But saying that, one wonders why so many bones are scattered everywhere considering how hard and wasteful it would to eat such small prey without swallowing them hole. I can only surmise that unlike real crocs that dissolve the bones of their prey, Gnarle just shits them out intact like a bear would if it swallowed a chipmunk. Looking forward to reading any more with Gnarle in it, but once he's gone and it is just "pony on pony vore" I will probably stop. Thanks for sharing!
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
he can digest bones, he just likes to cough them up so his lair is more then a little morbid. he also likes to slowly butcher ponies and feel their bones snap, so in a way he is a tad bit wasteful, but hey his mentally unhinged so its normal for his semi feral self.
Posted by Gone 6 years ago Report
I'm going to be perfectly honest and say I don't remember giving you permission to use Bail Bonds.
That being said, clearly you have something going here. I'm not going to read it, myself, but if you do continue this in the future I'd like you not to use Bail once you're past a point in the story where she's needed.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
suure, but i definitely had your permission when i started this. if you would like i could dm You the DM's i still have them saved.
Posted by Gone 6 years ago Report
No, forget it. Have fun.
Posted by doomfister 6 years ago Report
kk, glad to see your back, in some capacity volt, i loved your stuff.