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Kyana was relaxing after a hefty meal of around 8 people. Interrupting her rest, a portal opened, allowing a ton of people through, but also plunging Kyana somewhere she might not be familiar with...
A sequel to the story Separative Gluttony and an adaption of the story Differing Times.
Someone commented on the original, pointing out a few flaws in the text. I wasn't planning on fixing it, but it was so minor that it bugged me a lot, so I went ahead and fixed it. Hope this version is just as (if not more) enjoyable than the original .w.
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Posted by minasan 5 years ago Report
This fills in the holes in the previous story at least. Though I'm not sure why you kept the gagging from the feeling of cum in her stomach at all instead of her just enjoying it given the direction you wanted it to end up in.
I'm glad for the new version to make it work better though.
Posted by yEeTbOi 5 years ago Report
I'm glad you enjoyed the revisions. I enjoy it too, because what you pointed out were such small errors that it bugged me. I kept the gagging because I feel like if you had something slam against your stomach wall, you'd probably gag on it. Anyways, thanks a lot for pointing that out, glad I could help you to better grip this story .w.
Posted by minasan 5 years ago Report
Well I would probably throw up if something was moving around inside my stomach. Kyana commonly has entire people struggling in there and banging on the walls though. By comparison to that some goo flung against the walls isn't that significant.
Posted by yEeTbOi 5 years ago Report
True, but she'll get used to it. Eventually .w.