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Thomas begins tutoring a girl his age, but soon he learns she has a particular interest in him
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Posted by Randomdude5 5 years ago Report
First I want to say that I really like your story however there are some things that I don't understand. What is the line "It is in my dresser mean? My other issue is the ending feels missing. It leaves me with questions like What is next? Will he stay in the room for awhile or try to go home early? How will he get past the guard and the butler? Are the security lax enough for him to sneak past with a giant bulge? Will he swallow air for Stella? How long will Stella stay alive. Am I asking too many questions. Also I dont know commenting etiquette well and dont know if im being too critical.
Posted by bearboy95 5 years ago Report
Her comment was about where the money was. It's implied that Stella's dinner now :p
I ended it there because I thought the story had gone long enough