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I'm kind of sad that this is the last week of my summer break and that I've gotten a lot of things distracting me from writing more of these. I don't think this one is super good but what do I know? I have low self esteem so maybe I'm not the best critic to trust. Plus I was too lazy to find an image for this one haha.
So the deal is that after this I'm just going to post freely whenever. I'm going to try my best to post weekly but no promises. Hope you like this, contact me on discord if you want to at all (even though I'm not on super often).
PS I'm still trying to write an extra story to make up but like I said, no promises.
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Posted by xvx17 4 years ago Report
I hardly read a part of the story and I'm already fascinated. just to start there was something I liked, the protagonist's first-person monologue, her personality and feelings about the situation she is currently in. I also loved that there are small dams, and although she only sees them as food, she wants to talk to one of them bored. At this moment we come to what I liked the most: the conversation of the protagonist with her food. apparently, the girl does not decide whether or not it will enter the mouth of her predator. That is a beautiful and perfect combination of ready and unprepared prey. At the end of the conversation, the prey decides to enter the protagonist's mouth, however, before doing so, he receives a burp on his face, probably produced by the last thing the protagonist ate. All of this makes me want to know much more about how this whole universe you wrote works. I still don't know how society works in this world, but I really want to find out. Keep reading, thank you very much for writing something so wonderful. With just what I have read, it has already become one of my favorite stories. And who knows, maybe when I finish reading it will be my favorite story. I apologize for the long text, but I needed to express how much I liked this beginning. I don't speak English, so use a translator.
Posted by xvx17 4 years ago Report
I'm done with this story. Apparently you came back to make that combination that I like so much. Indecision. not being sure if what you want is to be devoured or not. I also felt sorry for the couple that the protagonist devoured, that is something that makes me sad but strangely excites me at the same time. He also said that although the protagonist let some preys go, someone else would eat them sooner or later, that leaves me with many doubts ... I would like to know how this whole universe works, where do the prey come from? What determines if Are you a prey or a predator?
It would be great if you wrote more about this. Thanks again for writing it, I will be attentive to your next writings.
Posted by SomeoneSomwhere 4 years ago Report
Thank you for all of the kind words!
I've never put much thought into the world building of my setting between my two characters because I never thought it was important but maybe it's something worth thinking about in the future now that you mention it. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it ^.^