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I can never get the formatting to display nicely on Eka's or on Deviantart, so I recommend viewing on Google Drive here:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ByUZi-hFlq01JVreJsFbNjE9NSkbIpt-aak2UdGXZqU/edit?usp=sharing
Ok, so this is a bit of an experiment.
When I first wrote Digestion 101, the characters were pretty one-dimensional and I was perhaps too concerned with the setting and world-building than actually telling a story.
(You can find the original work here: https://aryion.com/g4/view/556278 )
Now while I am tempted to call this a "fixed" version, I hesitate to do so because I suspect that some readers may not in fact enjoy it as much as the original.
The original version was a potentially stand-alone (I wasn't sure if I was going to write a follow-up chapter) piece of erotica written to have enough sexy content to satisfy someone reading it as a piece of smut.
This reworked version, however, changes gears to fit in better as the first chapter of a longer romance story (with fun things like character growth and stuff!) and as such may not scratch the same itch as well.
Ultimately, I'm not going to take down the original version, so if you, erm, need something to read in a hurry then you're always welcome to revisit that one. However, I do have a third instalment with these characters in the works and I wanted there to be a proper beginning to their story. So here you go!
Please, whether you feel that you liked the original version more or if you prefer this one, let me know with a comment or a private message or whatever. This is a hobby that I mainly do for my personal enjoyment, but I do really appreciate the people who take the time to read my stuff, and I do want to continue writing the kinds of stories that you guys enjoy.
P.S. Thumbnail Image by the wonderful and talented Owlizard: https://aryion.com/g4/user/owlizard
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Posted by RB23 4 years ago Report
fan of the original but this is undoubtedly way better. that being said I think you're right not to take down the first version, like you said, it scratches an itch.
really weird to see something from like 2 years ago get revisited like this, what was it that made you want to go back? anticipation for the 3rd chapter?
Posted by glargicus 4 years ago Report
I was re-reading the first chapter and realised that the characters in the story didn't match with the characters in my head any more.
I've got some of chapter 3 written, but it's in the queue behind No Guts No Glory 8. I'm keen to keep going with this once I finish that (and publish it alongside NGNG 9 which is already finished)
Posted by timestimes 4 years ago Report
Yea, this new version is way better. The first was good, but like you said the characters were pretty one dimensional, and I didn't really care for them one way or the other.
This version, however, I'm actually pretty interested to see where this crush Billie seems to have will go, and whether or Nathan'll end up like most of the male protagonists in your stories.
Hopefully the next entry comes sooner then later, there's a story worth reading here.
Posted by glargicus 4 years ago Report
Thanks! I'm really glad you like this reworking. I was so worried that people would dislike the change to be even further away from the typical "grab'n'gulp" vore story.
Posted by Destroyah23 4 years ago Report
Quick question. Are you planning to rework the other chapters? Or do you think the current chapters are fine? I just recently discovered your channel and I’m not sure if I should read the older versions of your 2nd and 3rd chapters of D101
Posted by glargicus 4 years ago Report
I am going to redo Digestion 201, and I've just finished uploading 102. It's really up to you if you'd like to read the older versions. They're heavier on the vore/sexy content and less focused on the characters than the newer versions. If you're looking for straight-up erotica you'll probably be better off with the older chapters, if you want more fleshed out characters in more of a romance story then you'll likely prefer the newer versions. Whether it's worth it to read both depends on what you want to get out of a story like this.