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Dawn and Ash continue their journey while the former digests her friend-turned-meal.
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Word Count (this part) — 7,992
Word Count (overall) — 28,534
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Part 3 of a commission for Anon.
This one is an experiment in writing long-term digestion. Let me know if you guys like it; criticism and suggestions for approaching scenes like this would be appreciated.
Part 2: https://aryion.com/g4/view/636092
Part 4: https://aryion.com/g4/view/642569
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MOBILE: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19Qqk0hK4F-tcUU2O2O7M-EyfrPhHlVSe1-0nt6wedho/edit?usp=sharing
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Visual aid for the characters
Dawn (normal outfit): https://cdn.bulbagarden.net/upload/b/b2/Dawn_BW2.png
Ash: https://www.pngitem.com/pimgs/m/485-4858552_pokemon-diamond-and-pearl-ash-hd-png-download.png
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Posted by The K 4 years ago Report
Amazing! I love Dawn so much and this was like the perfect story for her. Loved the detailed digestions, the amazing belly sloshing details, and the burping. Can't wait for part 4.
Posted by lllll1337 4 years ago Report
Thank you! ^^
Posted by MidNightOwlArt 4 years ago Report
Wait wait wait!! Hold on!
Why is this longer???
Did you love the story so much that you add MORE to this??
I never expected this but fully welcomed!
I was wondering about the “part 1 of 4” thing from the beginning and i wonder how you were going to spit it because 2 or 3 should be enough.
But making this longer though? Very surprising.
One more question, do you get paid to do more or you do it yourself for fun?
Posted by lllll1337 4 years ago Report
I'm glad the surprise is welcome ^.^
I added more for fun and because it was a good opportunity to practice writing a long digestion scene. I've learned a lot from working on this, and I can't thank you enough for giving me the commission ^~^
Posted by MidNightOwlArt 4 years ago Report
While i was surprised by this updated story there is a few problems i need to address about this commission we did.
Unfortunately i have to talk about this tomorrow because I’m currently at work today (hate Saturday work...)
I’ll PM you about them later tonight if you are willing to talk about it.
Posted by lllll1337 4 years ago Report
Alrighty! I'll check in with you whenever you send the PM.
Posted by pbysteria 4 years ago Report
love the idea of a stomach ballooning with acid like that, and great auditory descriptions. Good stuff!
Posted by lllll1337 4 years ago Report
Thank you! ^^