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A shopkeeper is pleasantly surprised when a regular customer, a cute, if somewhat shy adventurer, finally asks her out on a date. Unfortunately, things don't exactly go as she'd hoped...
Hey, those tags contain some spoilers. Read with care. Also, an additional warning: this story features a bit more, uh... let's call it unpleasantness than you might be used to from me. Be warned.
First things first, I want to thank two people who helped actually get this off the ground and finally finished.
iliketoread for giving feedback on the rough concept before it even popped up on the idea list (sorry this one wound up drifting away from your personal tastes).
Progressive for helping wrangle the gradually-mutating concept into something vaguely manageable and ironing out an actual outline, as well as providing excellent proofreading and general feedback.
Whoops, this took a bit longer than I'd hoped. I'd like to say life just got in the way, and I guess that would be half true, but honestly I struggled with this one. I think it's a mix of my own growing self-imposed standards and some genuinely tricky lines I had to walk with this piece. With any luck it's worth the wait. Hopefully the next short will be out much sooner. I've got several WiPs that I'm going to go back to in the next day or so. And I am still working on Anna stuff. It's just been on the back-burner as I use these shorts to explore some new territory.
This one clocks in at just over 6.5k words.
Minor Spoilers Below:
So, as you might've guessed, this is the end-result of that "Shopkeeper and Adventurer" prompt from my third list. If you've taken a quick glance at the tags (or hopefully read the actual story) you'll have noticed things changed a bit. Okay, a lot. It's difficult to nail down exactly why this happened. If I had to pin it on one thing in particular, a certain f/f same-size comic strip struck a particular chord with me, and maybe this was just my way of dealing with that. Who knows, really? I sure as hell don't.
Otherwise, I hope you enjoy.
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Posted by thequietmanno1 4 years ago Report
"If I had to pin it on one thing in particular, a certain f/f same-size comic strip struck a particular chord with me, and maybe this was just my way of dealing with that. "
which one? i'd like to find out if it lead to this story having a more whole-some ending that 'one-night stand' and a trip to the nearest toilet
like, ok, dinette feels guilty about what she did, but she obviously cares about Adelynn, to the point she just can't stop herself from getting close to her, no matter how much she knows it's a bad idea
hope to see more of these two, and maybe they can come to a happy ending together
Posted by thecheese01 4 years ago Report
Okay, disclaimer: I wouldn't read too much into this as a direct source of inspiration for overall plot, but it was this one by phex.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 4 years ago Report
Funnily enough, all the talk about episodes and missing memories led me to believe that addy was pred, I shouldve known it was a red herring. I do hope they can get their happy ending and Linette can sort out her odd habbits, assuming theres a sequel. Either way it was great to read
Posted by thecheese01 4 years ago Report
Hey, the red herring worked. That was actually something of a happy accident when I was writing out an early draft of some of those first few scenes, and I wound up leaning into it with rewrites. I'm always a sucker for a happy ending, but as things are now... something might be standing in their way.
Posted by Valorie 4 years ago Report
I really liked this, thanks!