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—And the finale.
Each cup needs only a single drop of honey, and it’s perfect.
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There you have it. For those of you that stuck it out to the end, were your suspicions confirmed or were you as surprised as the Bachelor? I would be pleased if you were to let me know.
Everything was so inconvenient and manual back then, wasn't it? There was so much work they had to do every day, and it took all day just to perform a few errands around town. On the other hand, their lives were slow and uneventful compared to ours. Isn't it incredible how much time and technology has changed everything? I wish we could combine the best elements of both the bygone days and modern times. Imagine somebody going from the later to the former...
Well, let's put a pin in that idea until I get done revising the other novel. In the intervening time, I'll have some shorts for offer.
Ah, to post things again! After four months, I hope it was worth the wait.
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Posted by FirstOf71st 4 years ago Report
Alright, first your question: I was surprised by the final chapter's twist, but only because Mr. Bachelor walked right into it with no suspicions of his own. I had a vague feeling that the powerful people up top were responsible once it was established that the letters were being carefully censored and not just lost. So if I had actually stopped to think about it, I probably would've concluded one of the Patholders was responsible. However, mystery novels were never my jam, and I was fixated mainly on the character relations this time around.
Now with that out of the way, let me congratulate you on a job well done. I think this novel was a distinct step up from "Hunting Paradise," feeling more focused, streamlined, and entertaining overall. A lot of this is thanks to the protagonist; a scholarly "baby" of a rich family struggling to prove his worth in the real world was quite an easy character for me relate to. Verbose narration is also my guilty pleasure, and it's a style that went quite well with the pseudo-19th century setting. I feel absolutely spoiled that vore literature with this level of quality and depth exists.
My one complaint is that we never got to see the feared lanterned lodge itself, or any of the wild predators outside the city. Given who the narrator is and how the plot shaped up, I suppose this would have been impossible. However, the lack of that information does give an excellent air of mystique to Sunchaser once we figure out her origins. On some level, her backstory almost feels like the real mystery of the novel.
Meanwhile, there's yet another novel on the way? Whatever it is, I'll be glad to see another longer piece from you.
Posted by ObsidianSnake 4 years ago Report
Thanks for the comment!
This might seem strange, but I'm delighted that somebody identified Sunchaser as the true mystery. A friend of mine, another writer, is into stories with two protagonists with their own slightly divergent narratives, and that inspired me to try something based on it.
The timing on this comment was appropriately timed; I was posting another novella tonight! There will be a novelette coming as early as next week, too. Anybody wanting longer works from me are in luck this month!