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Lucas has grown tired of his cushy life at the Micro Sanctuary and tries to get back out into the real world. He lands a job at the local zoo, but how ready to rejoin society was he when working with some "troublesome" she-wolves causes a bit more drama than he signed up for?
This tale takes place in the same universe as "A safe place to Stay", "A Little too Tempted", and "Bad Influences" for reference but these are DEFINITELY NOT must-reads for context. This piece is juicy enough to be its own standalone story so enjoy ;)
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Posted by ocarinaofbudder 3 years ago Report
Great read as always! I just love the dynamic of micros having normal everyday jobs. Especially when one tiny mistake could end it all for them. Sorry for rambling on but ill give this one another 5 stars. Good day! ;p
Posted by Guy8136 3 years ago Report
Thanks I feel the same knowing one slip up could mean ending up someone else’s snack ;)
Posted by tomsketchit 3 years ago Report
I like how seriously you have characters other than the preds take this. It's refreshing that not all of them are completely uncaring.
Posted by tomsketchit 3 years ago Report
Or at least that there is some level of consequence for eating another living creature, even if small.
Posted by Guy8136 3 years ago Report
Thanks! I like to think at least some of the preds weigh the consequences before slurping up an unfortunate micro ;)
Posted by GGO 3 years ago Report
Loved it! I look out for your stories because they are always 10/10.
I enjoyed that small detail at the end with the chain after being "passed". It added an element that we have yet to see with the fate of little micros :)
Posted by Guy8136 3 years ago Report
Thanks! Thought I’d try branching out into new elements of the micro’s “journey”
Posted by Quortle 3 years ago Report
Love all your stories! Out of curiosity, would you ever write non-fatal?
Posted by Guy8136 3 years ago Report
Thanks and yeah I’m definitely open to it!
Posted by Arbon 3 years ago Report
My only disappointment with this story is that we didn't see much from Lucas's perspective after he was swallowed. Love the scenario, the characters were hilarious, and I'm curious how Pepper and Lady feel about being zoo exhibits.
Editing-wise, you tend to "..." a lot throughout the text and that makes it look unpolished, you'd be better served by putting in environmental descriptions during the pause instead of constantly halting the story when someone isn't talking right that moment. Describe the smells, reinforce details about the location, have characters preform body motions like fidgeting or shifting stances. It doesn't have to be important, it just has to fill up that empty space with something more interesting than constant dots.
Posted by Guy8136 3 years ago Report
Thanks I appreciate the notes! I’ll be more conscious of that and try to fill more of that space!
Posted by milktoast 2 years ago Report
I like how in this universe people seem a little sad when tinies get eaten, but not sad enough to like, rescue them by feeding their pred an emetic :p
Posted by Guy8136 2 years ago Report
Yeah the observers tend to give up pretty quick after they might see an unfortunate tiny get slurped up ;)