Posted by MemesRUs 3 years ago Report

I love how much of a fucking gremlin she is. Her stomach is almost as tall as she is.

Posted by SilhouetteofKid 3 years ago Report

I like aspects of the pic. The grays are a nice touch, looks like they put a lot of effort into naming each book, very impressed with the amount detail they put especially with the different objects.

Now, the other stuff is the perspective is very off, we really shouldn't be seeing the top of those books from this angle and just the overall angle of entire scene doesn't look right. Neo's body proportions are off too, her head looks like it doesn't fit her body and her head shouldn't be turned the way it is, Neo's not an owl. XD

Overall, I'd say that this very well drawn, impressively so, obviously needs some more work, but for what it is, I think they did a great job. Tell em to keep it up. owo b

Posted by MrMetroid 3 years ago Report

Well, as far as Neo's perspective goes, part of thats probably because shes leaning on one leg - i drew her in mid-step/mid-waddle with one foot off the ground; not gonna lie that its an unconventional angle and a bit of an experiment on my end, though i figured Neo's acrobatic nature would let her pull it off (dont think i'd have tried it for someone like Nora).

Likewise, her proportions are admittedly a bit different compared to canon - her ass has gotten wider (generously large now, to quite the story) and her hair's tied up and stuffed under a burglar cap, so that's probably made the proportioning of her head look a bit different than her standard self.

As for the books, thats definately my fault - i had trouble finding good references Jacques' office in the angle i wanted (a shot of the shelves from Neo's height), so i eyeballed it. Bit sad i must have fudged it though, but i guess its just proof i gotta practice more with background dinensions. ^_^;

That said, thanks for the indepth review - hope you dont mind the response' size, though; i love getting peer reviews is all ^_^;

Posted by SilhouetteofKid 3 years ago Report

Hey no problem. ^^ Your art is really good, your art of Tock is great. You honestly have a lot of skill.

Posted by TheCyberEmpire 2 years ago Report

The art from MrMetroid is very great since I love the previous art, being Tock, Nora, Elm and Harriet. I hope I'm not forgetting any RWBY art. x3

By far, this art of Neo with a big gut, filled with valuables, Ruby and Yang is pretty awesome! <3 Since I always love and imagining someone as smol as Neo having a large and gurgly gut from swallowing people or stuffing themselves with lots of food. :3

The one thing I liked the most about the story and this piece of art is Willow. Her having an big and gurgling gut, filled with alcohol is really ((And sorry if I act a bit naughty)) sexy. >:3

I just REALLY hope that their will be more Willow Schnee stories and other stories that has Willow in them from you and the art from the talented MrMetroid in the future! I'll give this art and story a 100 out of 10. ^w^

Sorry for my really long comment, I was just very happy to see Neo and Willow having a big and noisy belly like that in art and story form. XD

Or in Willow's case, a alcohol, gurgling and tight ((Or sloshy)) belly that needs belly rubs and her letting out gas when she wakes up. X3

Posted by CadenGallic 2 years ago Report

Do not ever apologise to me for a long and detailed comment, those are some of my favourites!

Yeah the Willow thing was honestly a late addition but once I did start slipping her in, it became one of my favourite bits. No promises but I definitely want to feature Willow in her own story at some point in future with a considerably boozier belly.

Glad you enjoyed both the story and the artwork, I'm positive the artist is happy to see this!