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As usual, thumbnail made and sauced by Kisekae. Also, another disclaimer, but this trilogy was written in spirit of what  Scion would have commissioned, if it weren't for being shafted themselves.

Now with that out of the way...

Knew the, or 'an' ending to this improv trilogy at the beginning. This is now putting it to words, or 'a' version, give or take improv to make it 'last' long enough under an intiminative dating fuck night.

I'd like to say this was fueled by some sort of atmospherical music. But instead, background covering on extreme female body builders, won the day.

So, consider this; the final 'period' to Martha's latest 'catch'. On a possitive note, compared to an alt ending that out of 'spite', I'll let simmer for awhile. Whilst I cover the rest of my backlog'd stories.

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skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

Heh or how to derail a muscle building pred route.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Or is it?

I'd treat this as a 'happy' ending, compared to a predatory 'alternative' bad ending, that'd be a far 'shorter' delay, to an implied next period, for Martha.

Incidentally, it'd be a bit of a positive ending, for her 'cover' story as having constant miscarriages (as her 'excuse' for all those fully regressed 'charges'.)

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

What a twist , but it makes me wonder if she would truly stop for very long after there babies born?

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Honestly, Martha would go back to the saddle. Predatory regression wise. Past that, dunno if she'd have a singular, or twins or more? I'll leave that, to the reader's imagination.

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

If your last story about ovarian cramps is a indicator, I think that’s a good indicator I still think that was a brilliant back drop even if there’s no correlation, at some point the pleasure that kills is the pleasure that thrills , muscles , youth?growth for the sake of growth is the ideology of a cancer cell.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Depends on the take?

Honestly though. Unlike the previous one, her's is more like a 'meal', than a means of extended lifespan. So at a stretch, probably wouldn't live 'as' long as the "Long-term ovarian entrapment" predator? But at the very least, she ain't getting "Critical Predatory Ovarian bloat" anytime soon.

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

You make it sound like one hell of a drug but I’ll be keeping my eyes open! And the way you write it certainly encourages intrigue and a good reread.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

My, thank you for loving my stories to the point of rereading them. If nothing else, I'm of the bias opinion of loving voreshadow, or foreshadow before the action. :)

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

Keeps my mind sharp good foreshadow is a window into a well laid plot and that much more of a satisfactory ending . I don’t think a story can truly be read once without going back and catching something that maybe you have different insight into in-till it’s played out to see how it fits into the bigger structure.

Groblek

Posted by Groblek 2 years ago Report

Ooh, that’s an interesting end to this series. With her “consumption” of Mary implied to take place via regression and this taking place just as she’s gone “all the way”, I can’t help wondering if what was left of her ended up as part of the baby Martha’s ended up pregnant with.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

That... Is an honest mystery IMO. "Did she" got fertilized before Maxim was nearly fatally Unbirthed, or as he fucked her fallopian tubes instead? Is a mystery.

My bias hunch is, the latter. But way I write it, interpretation could be a whole different story. That, and had ideas/plans for a more fatal alternative ending (for Maxim.)

But it'd probably be a case of "another two weeks" before Martha get's to ingest/unbirth her targeted prey (Sabrina.) Unlike the nine months for a child, she was passively wanting, but not really woried, in-story?

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Regardless. Thanks for the comment, and hope you enjoy the rest of my recently submitted stories! :)

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Incidentally; "Period" wise, I felt it was a bit of a different, and often ignored/forgotten take to full regression. When the prey isn't absorbed by the Womb (or Uterus/Placenta), and instead expelled like a period, once they're all "sucked" up.

Think I was inspired on that idea on one of your earlier fatal unbirth stories, with a yandere pred. But hey, it could also be a more 'milder' take on say; "Cum Digestion" if you think of it in a certain view/lens.

Regardless. All those regressed/absorbed prey, at least helped Martha with her muscle growth, balanced diet and all.

Groblek

Posted by Groblek 2 years ago Report

My wondering was with the thought that Mary’s regression would involve going all the way back to an egg, and wondering if that egg might have been in Martha’s fallopean tubes on the way to her final destination when Maxim decided to flood those with his sperm.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Nah. The intent on this trilogy is Martha 'typically' expels her eggs as discharge, period wise. That said, whose to say that the constant sex she had, unwittingly fertilized that egg instead?

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

It’s interesting I like the idea since this started with a detective angle that groblek is onto something with Mary yes it’s probably not cannon . But it does add to what I call “the prey bites back” angle and the justice in that Mary survives as her child and you could have a possible spin off from a detective eye that she figures out her past identity and takes revenge due to the life she had stolen this is a ultimate example of identity theft , because when you think about it , its more ammo for you to work with or other but food for thought even if at the end there’s really only one true path. Martha is no innocent but there is some vindication that Martha tried to have her cake and eat it to only for it to bite her down the road

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Still, to some hack lens I think I left wriggle room for interpretation. Even if as a writer, I have a bias against.

Alternatively, if you're going under "Mary" being reincarnated. It'd probably be nothing more than a biological inclination to say; "learning" at best. And past that, probably might end up being as much a sexual predator as Martha, if only so she has to eat less, so she can read more books without being tired?

That said, justice wise. Martha's probably got at most here... a minor setback. But a welcome one, over an ironic 'child'. At a stretch if going 'maybe' for due justice/process. Maybe she'd be hit with a police or "secret operative" strike team. But that'd probably in my bias, be more 'bio fuel' for her. Albert, maybe 'far more' than she would comfortably unbirth and 'carry', fatal regression wise.

Assuming, Martha doesn't eat them like "Junk Food", and complains on how they'll add 'pounds' to her, whilst she's regressing her latest 'catch'.

skorm

Posted by skorm 2 years ago Report

Interesting spin you played to that in that she’d be as big a pred, well I watch with eager eyes lemon . The stage is set and we the audience watch in fascination.