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The Stranded raft(the good end) By booberman -- Report

3 sailor girl stranded on useless raft with no way to travel the ocean. Stranded between the blue-dept and the sky. Walled by the everlasting thunder storm that sinking various ship throughout history. luckily they are heading in opposite direction of the storm by the ocean wave beneath the raft toward the soft and still wave of the ocean surface . Still no islands on the horizon . no food no harpoon they desided to sit still on the raft to conserv energy . everything went well for a while... until something drive bombing them... made one of the girl to fall into the ocean... and then another being come out of the ocean... rightnow the fallen girl is very warm... with her friend watching her fearfully...unknowing the fate of their wet and warm friend on other side of the raft... (this one is my first attempt on story focus on narrative and detail of the situation so it have a lot of text and it a good ending version. I hope you enjoy )

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coolblooded

Posted by coolblooded 2 years ago Report

Interesting. Are you going to do bad end?

booberman

Posted by booberman 2 years ago Report

Yes, I do have plan to writing the bad end of this story in future but I can't Guarantee the exact date(probably the long while) but thank you for reading my story! any part of the story you like the most? Opinion welcome :D

coolblooded

Posted by coolblooded 2 years ago Report

It was interesting to read a little short on reactions from prey in stomach but beggars cant be choosers. Only advice i have is to lengthen the whole story a little.