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Clinic By ObsidianSnake -- Report

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Maizey the cow always wanted a child of her own. With all preparations made, she makes an appointment for insemination at the clinic. It doesn't go as she expects…

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Snekpizza

Posted by Snekpizza 2 years ago Report

Poor cow lady, very hot tho! I like!

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Snekpizza

Posted by Snekpizza 2 years ago Report

Will you be making more stories with this bat?

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ObsidianSnake

Posted by ObsidianSnake 2 years ago Report

I'm not currently planning to; I think they'd be repetitive, as this story illustrates the routine. One-shot characters are like that. I'm definitely taking a note on the interest, though!

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Snekpizza

Posted by Snekpizza 2 years ago Report

Makes sense, it will get repetitive. Very nice one shot tho!

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Mourtzouphlos

Posted by Mourtzouphlos 2 years ago Report

So if I'm putting things together correctly, the secretary has been messing with the appointments to feed people to the bat to get him to come in more often so she'll be able to ask him out and be accepted. But why did the bat and Maizey have different times for the appointment? She was able to just flip tomorrow's appointment, so why was there something extra going on today?

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ObsidianSnake

Posted by ObsidianSnake 2 years ago Report

Ah-ha, the difference is a small plot hole caused by re-writes. They were intended to have the same time, except Maizey would be early. Nice eye for detail! You win:....nothing, sorry. :(

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Mourtzouphlos

Posted by Mourtzouphlos 2 years ago Report

:) I actually didn't notice it the first time, but when I got to the end I specifically read through it again a couple times to find those little details and make sure I was able to put everything together.

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