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Hey everyone! I finally got this story done as well!! I hope the idea fits what other people thought of. I thought it's pretty good.
As usual pleasee comment and let me know what you like about it! Also, if you'd like to give me any ideas if I like them I'll more than likely do them in the future!
I have my next story already planned, it's the first time I'll have a repeat predator, but I think that'll be fine. If you watch Konosuba then hopefully you'll like it even more, if not then if you like my work you'll probably like it anyway. That'll be it from me for now, I really hope you enjoy this story too!
Posted by Ooubliette 1 year ago Report
Another amazing story!! I really liked the secret lab setting and the second half is intennnnnse! The struggle of that girl is hooot!
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Posted by Keikaa4 1 year ago Report
Thank you so much for the comment!! I'm so glad you like it!
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Posted by Mechdragon1k 1 year ago Report
I bet this pred going to get several more meals, if likes a prey enough, might it throw it up in it den and keep it alive?
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Posted by Keikaa4 1 year ago Report
Well, considering what happened, it may not get any more meals as cute as the one it just had, but they probably started to feed it larger meals!
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Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
I enjoyed that story. Thank you for writing it. I can't give you much advice on how to improve, because I am not good at writing. Some of the sentences feel choppy, or the wording feels awkward.
One thing that popped out at me that bugs me is that you mentioned that it was extremely hot inside the worm. Worms are cold blooded, so this doesn't make sense. I see 2 ways to easily fix this. It could be a warm blooded worm, or it could have a heat lamp in its encloser. Cold blooded animals are often given one.
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Posted by Keikaa4 1 year ago Report
I also don't really think of myself to be a super good writer, in fact, most of the time I just kinda get through the actual story, I much prefer writing the vore part, so sorry if it sounds a little off.
I actually didn't know that about worms, I just think really uncomfortable stomachs are hott pff you could also say that it's her really heavy breathing that makes it warmer due to her breath? I don't know for sure.
Did you like anything a lot? I used the transparent idea, but I thought it'd be nice for a science-y setting.
Also, sorry if this is a bit long, but do you know of Konosuba? If you do, then the next story is going to be about a Crimson Demon girl and a frog, since I think Megumin and her classmates are cute, so I'll make my own character and make a story from that! Regardless, I hope you'll like it.
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Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
You will get better at writing with practice. I like your content, so it doesn't matter that it is not perfect.
I like to have some realism in a vore story if it doesn't get in the way of what makes vore sexy. Tomori's body heat would slowly increase the temperature inside the worm's stomach, because the worm's body would act as an insulator. It would be extremely humid inside the stomach because it wouldn't have ventilation and stomachs are wet. The prey's breath would have a small effect on how hot and humid it was inside the worm's stomach, but it would be small.
I enjoyed the transparent worm idea that you used. I also enjoyed it in a sciency setting.
I know very little about Konosube. Is that the setting where there is a goddess named Aqua, a knight named Darkness, and a mage named Megumin who likes to use an explosion spell? I am not really picky on the setting and I am looking forward to reading another story of yours about a hot girl being eaten.
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Posted by Keikaa4 1 year ago Report
Yes that's right, though a spinoff series came out and I think its very cute about Megumin. And I think Crimson Demons are cute, you can do a bit of searching of it if you want, but that's what it'll be.
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Posted by Neuro 1 year ago Report
How deliciously spicy! Always love some good hard digestion.
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Posted by Keikaa4 1 year ago Report
Thank you so much for the comment! I love it when the girl feels a lot of pain and is uncomfortable, I find it really cute, but maybe that's just my view of it.
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Posted by Neuro 1 year ago Report
It’s my view too!
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