Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I had wondered when you would post another story. I really enjoyed this one. The buildup in this story was very good, and sensual. I sometimes skip the build in stories, but this was really worth reading.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you for your kind words as always Mr. Dude. I also skip the buildup sometimes tbh, so I sometimes wonder if it’s even worth my time to write it at all. But I guess people do enjoy it, so thank you for confirming!

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

It is hard for me to describe why the buildup in this story is so good. The best reasons I can give is that it has something to to do the rising sexual tension from the teasing. I love good buildup, but sometimes it is hit or miss. I enjoy your stories, and hope that you can find an idea and the motivation to write more.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I’m sure I’ll find more time in the near future to get some more words down. For me, writing the buildup is part of the fun, even if I myself don’t always read it in other’s stories. It’s all for fun at the end of the day anyway, so I’ll do more when I feel like it (´◡`)

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

TBH, I almost always read the buildup the first time I read a story. I am much more likely to skip buildup when I have read a story before, and I am rereading for the good bits.

I had a random thought. One of the consequences of the prey being upside down in the stomach, is that she drowns faster. That may be a good thing or a bad thing depending on the perspective. Personally I like it when the prey stays alive for longer to experience her digestion. However one way I have read for a writer to get around that is to have the digestive fluids be viscous. That way they would be too thick and sticky to flow down to the bottom of the stomach, and cover the prey's head. Or the pred could lay on their back to prevent the prey from drowning while she is upside down in the pred's stomach. Of course the prey could slide right side up when being swallowed if the stomach is stretchy enough. I assume you wanted her upside down in the stomach to make her extra powerless.

The story felt a bit light on the digestion details, but that is probably my preferences biasing me. I assume it was that way for the soft digestion.
Don't take this ramble too seriously, this was just my mind going off on a tangent, because I like to talk about the mechanics of vore.

Posted by Voric501 1 year ago Report

Great story as always! This year is quite slow for writing for me too. I have more stories I want to publish, two of which are almost done, but I’m never quite satisfied, nor can I find the time to do so >.<

I hope I’ll be able to push them out soon!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Hey, I get it man. I hit a dry spell for like three months where I just didn’t do any writing. But the urge only really came back when I had stopped thinking about it for a while. I don’t know about you, but I personally find it easier to finish a story off than to start one, so to me it sounds like the hard part is done!
I’m sure you can finish them! And even if you take another 6 months, that’s nothing to be ashamed off!

Posted by Voric501 1 year ago Report

Same problems, but for me I have 2 blockage. First like you is getting started. I have 100s of single paragraph story synopsis that barely conveys an idea. These are easy to do when I have inspiration. But getting the actual story done, that’s another beast.

I also need to finish one before the other but here we are. But even then after the story is done, you still need some proofreading especially so that the text flows okay (I’m not really a grammar maniac), convert the file and publish it with all the relevant tags.

Since the finished story is good enough for my personal consumption, I need to push myself to do the extra effort to publish, hence I have 2 stories done. Hopefully I can finally get it done, the proof reading aslready stared on my first story and I started the identifying the tags.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

I always say: if it’s good enough for me, it’s good enough to just post. Though perhaps your standard are a little higher than mine, as I don’t even always proofread my whole story, hihi.
Stay strong, and don’t worry about it too much, methinks <3

Posted by Voric501 1 year ago Report

Haha! XD

I think its more that you have higher initial standards or writing skills than me because your stories are not on the same level as my writups currently. And while I understand myself and ignore more easily my mistakes, I never enjoyed being taken out of a story because of them, so I will definitely not do that to others.

Really, don’t worry about me, its all in good fun anyways! ^-^

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

That’s definitely the right mindset

Posted by zenitharms 1 year ago Report

Masterfully written. From the teasing both before and after the vore to the mouth-watering way you describe the prey's appearance, everything was pure genious and at moments I really felt like I was watching the stream were poor Lilly met her doom as a plump piece of meat. I also admire your patience while slowly yet flawlessly crafting the build-up to an incredible swallowing sequence followed by an equally incredible digesting sequence. It's very seldom that I see pictures or stories about vore ASMR (a concept that I like a lot), but you nailed it! Makes me wish you came back to the concept in some future story, although I know that you'd probably rather keep your work more diverse, which I completely understand. Anyway, great work, and I can't wait to see more by you!

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Wow wow wow, thank you for the wonderful string of complements! I´m glad you liked the swallowing and digestion scenes, because they were very fun to write!
I guess you are right about not seeing a lot of ASMR related vore, I mostly chose that topic because I got into it myself recently, haha.
You´re also right about it being pretty unlikely that I´ll do another story with it for a while. I think if I made shorter quicker stories I wouldn´t mind revisiting topics so much, but doing a similar thing to what I´ve already done feels sort of like a missed opportunity to me personally. Although I suppose most of my things still share like 75% of their tags lol

Posted by Bright 1 year ago Report

A coop stream with AMSR; betrayal and good buildup,
very nicely done. I quite enjoyed reading this.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

Thank you very much ;)

Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report

I will try to give a long review ramble thingy on this story too.

I like your intro. It shows who Lily is, and what content she streams. The detail about her making extra room for Sam by fiddling with her camera and mic.

One of my thoughts since I have read this story before is: Has Sam ever eaten anyone on stream before? If he has, then at least one of her viewers should have heard of, seen, or at least checked out his stream assuming that she announced the co lab ahead of time. If he did eat a woman on stream, and she announced it ahead of time, someone should have let her know not to trust him. The detail about her being quick to trust people helps make it more believable that she invites him into her house. Both of them are horny people, so if things get too sexual for the stream, it can just turn into a hookup. Maybe Lily was hoping that it would, since she picked him because of his looks. The fact that Samuel is handsome helps.
I like the details about Sam looking around her house and noticing that it looks different from this side of the camera. The conversation between Sam and Lily, where she asks him if he brought the pajamas, and mock salutes isn't arousing to me, but really helps add immersion into the story. This immersion makes the build up to the vore better, and that makes the actual payoff of the vore more satisfying.
In the story, you mentioned that Sam is not nervous. I think he might be, but it would be an excited nervousness, and a knowledge that he shouldn't mess everything up by springing the surprise at the wrong time. He does sound like a guy who would be confident.
I like that Sam thinks Lilly is hot. That makes vore better. I also like how both Sam and Lily plan to tease each other. That helps set the mood of the story, and how it will be sexual. There is something nice about how they both hit on each other.
Lily thinks that Sam would have betrayed her before she turned on the camera, and that is true, IF he was trying to hide what he is about to do from the law. If vore is illegal in this setting, what he is about to do would put him in jail for a very long time, since the prosecuter would have plenty of evidence from the stream.
I like how the fact that Sam and Lily are close to each other on the loveseat arouses them. The little detail about Lilly's soft thigh pressed against his is sexy.
Sam's twitter post to his viewers with the detail that they will be getting VERY close makes me think that he has eaten a girl on stream before, and is hinting to his viewers who know.
I like the way Sam teases that he shouldn't do sudden screaming into the microphone. It adds personality.
I also enjoy how Lily's chat is horny, and how Sam gets them calling him "Daddy" rather than just being jealous of him.

Here is a quote from your story. "One of the more original commenters writes: ‘with two chests this excellent, that'll be hard boss!’ To his delight, Sam notices that this particular chatter is a long time regular and moderator on his own streams. It’s always good to see failure faces (or usernames), especially since this one has likely guessed what his endgame is." I have several things to point out. Since the chatter might have guessed what Sam's endgame is, that means his stream knows about his eating habits. That means Lily could have theoretically been tipped off. You put the wrong word in the sentence. It should be "familiar faces" rather than "failure faces" :p I also liked how the commenter was creative, and it sums up how the stream is horny.
I like how Sam puts his hand on Lily's shoulder. It is slowly escalating the physical contact. In a non-vore story it would end with them having sex after stream, but this is a vore story. ;) I agree that it made sense for the story for Lily to like the physical contact too.
I enjoy how Sam makes Lily flustered, but I also enjoy how she tries to make him embarrassed too. This is the part of the story where the build-up is awesome. The sexual tension is increasing, and that makes the payoff of the vore later in the story much more rewarding. Her clothes sliding down her left boob is sexy.
Some of Sam's viewers trying to spoil his grand plan shows that she could have been tipped off. The easiest explanation I have, is that she didn't tell her community or her moderators, and didn't watch all his streams herself, so she missed his vore streams, and since no one knew that she was going to colab stream with Sam, no one knew to warn her.
I like how Lily takes back the initiative, by putting her legs on Sam, and say "Let's get a little more comfortable." into the mic. I like it when the woman is aroused and teasy. I also like how this arouses Sam. I like the details about how chat goes nuts. I also like how the close contact makes his stomach growl. You have so many details in here that add depth to the story.
I like how Sam contemplates when is the time to strike. It mentions that he might not enjoy it as much, if she finds out his true intentions. I'm not sure how she would find out, unless he had a Freudian slip, chat gave it away, or his stomach growled too loud. Since her finding out early would decrease his enjoyment, I assume that he likes the betrayal.
I like how you got them focused back on the stream, and then how Sam uses the comment "Where do babies come from?" as an excuse to put his plan into action. He pins her without her noticing by using the kiss as a distraction. This is very sexy, and when I read it the first time, I didn't know that he would choose that moment to eat her. The detail about how she accepts the kiss,enjoys it, and lets him grope her.
Using the kiss as the method for him to swallow her head first is clever. The switch from what had been intimate and sensual to what is horror for her is fun even tho I like willing vore. I like how she tastes nice to him, and he gives her breast a squeeze in celebration.
Sam busts the buttons off her top, to get at her. I don't notice anything about a bra, so maybe she didn't wear one. Clothing in vore is complex for me. Sometimes nude prey is better for tasting, and easier digestion, and sometime having the stomach melt the clothes off a girl, or melt the girl out of her clothes is more fun. You did a good job here too. I like the details about how much Sam enjoys Lily's body while swallowing her. I love it when a pred play with his food while swallowing her. I also like the detail where he chews on Lily's ass without damaging it. I like the damage to the prey's body to happen inside the stomach from the digestion. I don't have much more to say about the swallowing part of the story, other than "Good job!"

I have a few thoughts about Lily being upside down in Sam's stomach. If his stomach starts filling with acids, then she will drown quickly. Since her head is at the bottom of the stomach, it *might* start digesting first if it has much more time in contact with the acids then the rest of her body. One way to keep her from drowning quickly while digesting, might be to make Sam's stomach acids viscous. Of course handwaving the issue is fine too.

I enjoy how he teases chat about eating "Mommy", and that she was the best girl he ever ate. I like that he put the mic to his stomach to let her speak to the chat too. I think her statement of "You can't do this!" could have been replied to with "I just did!", although what he said is good to. While I would have preferred that Lilly become semi-willing, her being unwilling makes more sense, and I shouldn't complain. I also like how Sam changed the name of the stream.
I really like how Sam streams Lilly's digestion. While it would make sense for his digestion of Lilly to be slower from a more realistic perspective, because of the square-cube law, and how animals that swallow other whole take awhile to digest them, it makes sense for the stream time to have Lilly's digestion happen in only a couple hours. If he took a week to digest her, like a giant snake might, that would be much too long for a stream. Another realism complaint that I could use, is that her last words of "Please" happen right before she is liquid. She should be long dead if she is almost liquid, but I am being WAAAY too picky, and you can write your kinks.

I also enjoyed how Sam ended the stream, and rubbed in the fatality of what he just did to Lilly's fans.

This was a fantastic story, and was probably your best one so far. I hope you enjoy this ramble review.

Posted by MultipleCacti 1 year ago Report

wow. I mean wow. I'm not sure how I even respond to this. Like I don't think I even put as much thought into the story as you did this comment. Thank you, for enjoying what I make so much!