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So the next chapter of Worth A Shot is in progress still, I've had it about 70% done for a while but I just haven't really been "feeling" it, which I feel like hurts the final product.
In the meantime I dug through some of my older un-posted stories and found this one, which I wrote and never finished WAY before ever even starting Worth A Shot. Way back then I'd lost interest in this piece, but after enough time away I was finally motivated to just finish it up.
It's kind of weird to post something like this that I never thought I'd post...because since then I recycled most of the ideas and characters from this story into Worth A Shot, so a lot of this might seem strangely familiar, especially to "Amber's Party Favors."
Hopefully it's enjoyable and not too repetitive, regardless I figure something is better than nothing! If this gets received well I have a couple other old stories that I got most of the way through before abandoning, maybe I'll post those during the next dry spell, haha.
Technically I guess this takes place in the Worth a Shot/Shrinking Virus universe, but there isn't any character crossover and if there's any contradiction with the timeline of the virus don't overthink it :P
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Posted by GGO 1 year ago Report
Another 10/10! Love your stories. This story has the classic plot: friend loses shrinky, and bitchy girl gets her. What I like is that you added Kim as an accomplice, so it isn't just Alison sneaking off alone. It reminds me of an old Observer comic. Poor Jason though. He was just trying to get his dick wet and he got blue balled hard LOL
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Haha, I remember that comic! A classic.
Could've been my inspiration way back when I started this story (like 5 years ago?) but it's too long ago to remember at this point. In general I like friend duos in vore scenarios. It adds some believability I think. People are just more likely to do risky stupid things when their friends are there to egg them on.
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
This story definitely had the elements from "Worth A Shot" and it's universe. Very interesting plot and could actually be expanded on in the future if you so liked. As always though I am looking forward to reading the next chapter of "Worth A Shot" when you complete it. You are a masterful writer and I anticipate your stories when they come out. Very well written.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah I feel like almost everything from this story made it into Worth A Shot at some point. Alison and Jason are sort of proto Becca and Nate, and even though Sarah and Amber aren't that similar in terms of personality, obviously there's kind of a repeat with the "rich blonde girl throws party" thing.
I'm not going to say I'd never write a continuation to this, but I don't really have any plans to at the moment. I did have some fun writing the ending imagining if Kim would actually follow through with her promise to swallow the next shrinky they found, so maybe there's something there...
And hopefully it's not too much further for the next Worth A Shot chapter! It's been really close to done for a while, just gotta get into the vibe to finish it off.
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
Nice to hear the story is close to being completed. The uncaring nature of the preds in your stories coupled with the realization the prey that they are witnessing the end of their life is always written in a believable manner. You are one of the premier writers we have in this genre.
Posted by Joe3e 1 year ago Report
At least for me, the story read very much like it was in the same universe, which was great! It gives off a “let’s take a look at what’s happening in the town next door” type vibe. It was kind of cool to see parallel universe Amber/Nate/Becca lol
Posted by Joe3e 1 year ago Report
All I can say is Wow! I think like many, I was awaiting your next story and you did not fail to deliver. Not only do you write the “main event” well, but your lead-ups are just on another level for me. My favourite thing was how you added realism and tension when Alison was having trouble because of the clothes. Incredible work, thank you so much for sharing it!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Haha, it's funny you mention it because the clothes thing was something I always regretted not including in my other stories! When I wrote "Worth a Shot" I'd meant to include a scene where Becca put Hope in her mouth with clothes first and kind of gagged realizing her error and stripped her, but I didn't realize I'd forgotten to include it until I posted it!
After that it felt like a weird detail to include in future stories since it hadn't been an issue for Becca, so I guess preds in that setting just aren't bothered by swallowing tiny clothes with their food, lol.
Who knows though, maybe I'll feel like including it in a later chapter.
Posted by LazySWV 1 year ago Report
This is what I was going to comment on! My perspective has always been the "women in peril" aspect, so I love to describe the prey physically... and this prequel story is the first time you've mentioned clothes :P
I always assumed it was because you were helping the reader to paint themselves a mental picture of the prey, and too much description can get in the way of that.
But anyway, this is such a great story! It's amazing that this is an earlier story than your others, it seems like you've just always been really talented at writing believable people! It's something I really appreciate amongst a sea of stories about anime characters or other fanfaction...
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
In general descriptions are my weak point in writing I think. I like to write characters and dialogue, but the rest doesn't come as naturally to me.
And I definitely feel you on that last point, and that's why I've always liked your stuff too--there just isn't enough content out there about regular people! It's a lot harder for me to get into fanfiction stuff because I know how those characters behave and it always feels immensely out of character to me...
Posted by VortexFoodsTM 1 year ago Report
I'm a bit late for the party (ba dum tss), but finally got around to reading this. It's a very nice peek into your earlier writing and a lot of fun to read. A bit like these early drafts you get for famous movies like Star Wars - with some stuff being already very much like the final product (in this case, the overall setting), and some other things being... kind of familiar, but also different? Mainly thinking about the characters here. Alison and Jason are definitely earlier versions of Becca and Nate, and Sarah was a nicer (?) version of Amber.
I guess if you wanted to, you could make this a "canon" entry to your Worth A Shot series. At least I didn't notice any direct contradictions? After all, this kind of stuff appears to be happening throughout your world! :D
But yeah, excellent read with all your usual trademark qualities. Very good setup, excellent payoff, nice pacing, fun characters and smooth dialogue. Looking forward to reading "Promblems" as well, but not sure when I'm going to get around to it yet. Hopefully this weekend! :)
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah, when finishing the story up after years away, I scanned it for inconsistencies with my current stuff and so far haven't caught much.
I don't think there's anything stopping it from being canon, but if it is it takes place further into the timeline than the current Worth a Shot storyline. (Emma shrinking in 8th grade makes the story take place at least 3-4 years from the dawn of the virus, and Worth a Shot begins just over 2 years from the dawn of the virus.)
It would be an easy retcon I guess if I wanted the characters to cross paths as peers, but I think it's fun to work with the constrains I've accidentally created for myself. :P
So Alison and Kim might very well be out there a few towns over, but they're probably freshmen just starting high school, which I guess would mean Emma is still alive as well, at least for the moment.
Posted by Nalzindar 1 year ago Report
I really enjoyed this story, the buildup was long but very eventful and made fro a thrilling reading : )
I guess this is why you should be careful about letting strangers in to your party and get too drunk.
At the end of the party, only Alison and Kim got away with a (positive?) memory and for very different reasons I think I must feel bad for both Emma, Sarah, Chloe and Jason.
Strange at it might sounds, the last scene where Chloe starts to panic over her missing friend and Sarah's (possible later) reaction does excites me a bit, I wonder how it would be if Chloe got the chance to confront Alison about what happened (with evidence enough to know she is the guilty one).
Thank you for posting this"old" story, it was very much worth reading it and the story is on its own worthy enough for a sequel if you ever find yourself in the mood.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
That's an interesting scenario you're wondering about, and honestly not something I'd really considered. I could see a confrontation between Chloe and Alison being very interesting to write (maybe Alison or Kim can't help but gossip about what they did and word gets back to Chloe) and now you've got me really imagining it haha.
The only thing with these stories is the subject needs to be more than just interesting, it also needs to be sexy...so I'd also need to consider if there was enough pay off there to warrant a sequel.
Posted by Nalzindar 1 year ago Report
I got curious about this scenario also as a response to reading your Worth A Shot series (I'm still reading them so no spoilers please^^) where the people seems to get away with what they are doing so relatively easy. But I certainly don't complain about the sexiness, your way of convincingly building up the scenarios are fantastic.
Though while Kim and Alison might find this both sexy and awesome (like the rest of us), it does intrigue me how other people might react to this. And I agree, those two girls in this story seems like just the couple who would brag about it to the wrong person(s).
Anyway, keep up with he good stuff, your stories keeps me entertained : )
Posted by Scrumptious 1 year ago Report
Oh, wow, that really was something else! I enjoyed that a great deal. I look forward to reading your other stuff as well!