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A Foxtaur's Fiasco chapter 2 By Brisngr56 -- Report

So, it's been quite a while since I posted the first chapter and I have been trying to work on my writing in the mean time.
So the narrative is a bit different in this chapter. You do not need to have read the whole first chapter in order to follow this one. Since this chapter picks up almost directly after Kara's encounter with the hybrid family that she devoured in the first chapter. You just miss out on a bit of Kara's back story and that is all.
Also I will warn you, I went on quite the descriptive tangent more than once in this chapter. Which has made this chapter almost 12k words in length.
Any criticism is more than welcome, and I hope you enjoy the chapter.

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Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 1 year ago Report

That quite the ending, any chance the POV is tough enough to surive a shotgun blast, skull is tough and shotguns have terrible penetration so in a world far from baseline it might be possible.

Brisngr56

Posted by Brisngr56 1 year ago Report

I decided to remove the part at the end where Kara's brain and skull are splattered across the place.
But only because she would not have been around to see it. And it felt weird to keep the part in when still in first person POV.
So no, unfortunately the POV character's skull is not strong enough to withstand the hit from the shotgun slug.

Mechdragon1k

Posted by Mechdragon1k 1 year ago Report

Darn, I was cheering for her, Kara, deciding to save prey was neat.

Are you going to show harpy digestion in the next part.

WhiteWolf025

Posted by WhiteWolf025 1 year ago Report

Amazing piece of work, as always. Does she survive after that?, Something among the lines of... The bear missed the shot or somebody pushed her out of they way.

WhiteWolf025

Posted by WhiteWolf025 1 year ago Report

Cuz i would love ti SEE more of her history, same as with the doctor naga history, wich by the way, when are You going post part 5?.

Brisngr56

Posted by Brisngr56 1 year ago Report

It's in the works, but I don't have much time since I am finishing up summer classes for college and next semester is in like 4 weeks.