.......here's what i mean by constructive criticisms.
DONT BE AN ASS
tell me what i can do to do better instead of just saying everything i've done wrong.
please dont be a complete grammar Nazi. im not perfect by any means.
a normal day in the mountains... well normal enough for the z fighters. though right now its just bulma, her
daughter bulla, 18, her daughter marron, and pan. the four had been asked out to the middle of nowhere by
bulma to help her test a new invention. "now when i was younger i invented a watch to make me smaller, making
it A: possible for me to ride the nimbus and B: sneak into places easier." 18 blinked looking at her. "and?"
she sighs. "it was taken and destroye
Pan, Bulla, and Marron's mini misadventures
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im moving out of my home and i dont know when i'll get internet back so i'll see you guys when i do
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