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A lovely anniversary (F/FM, spitroast) By ineedallaccs -- Report

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A continuation of Emma's story from my previous "tourist trap" (https://aryion.com/g4/view/957878 ).
This one is quite long but I enjoyed writing it and hopefully you'll enjoy it too. Any feedback is highly appreciated as this is only my second story and am still trying to get better

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EloquentOrc

Posted by EloquentOrc 9 months ago Report

A very enjoyable read.

I liked the buildup of her falling in love with her husband and the dolcetian culture.
And the spitroasting was very enticing.

Bit of criticism on the formatting:
The story being one solid does make it harder to read, sometimes losing your place.
If you put in some spaces and divided it into paragraphs it would do a lot towards making it easier to read.

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ineedallaccs

Posted by ineedallaccs 9 months ago Report

Thanks for the feedback, I don't think the formatting was properly transferred from my document when I uploaded it. I think the blank spaces didn't get recognised but I don't know how to fix it now haha

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