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A continuation of Emma's story from my previous "tourist trap" (https://aryion.com/g4/view/957878 ).
This one is quite long but I enjoyed writing it and hopefully you'll enjoy it too. Any feedback is highly appreciated as this is only my second story and am still trying to get better
Posted by EloquentOrc 9 months ago Report
A very enjoyable read.
I liked the buildup of her falling in love with her husband and the dolcetian culture.
And the spitroasting was very enticing.
Bit of criticism on the formatting:
The story being one solid does make it harder to read, sometimes losing your place.
If you put in some spaces and divided it into paragraphs it would do a lot towards making it easier to read.
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Posted by ineedallaccs 9 months ago Report
Thanks for the feedback, I don't think the formatting was properly transferred from my document when I uploaded it. I think the blank spaces didn't get recognised but I don't know how to fix it now haha
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