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The tourist trap By ineedallaccs -- Report

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My first story about Amy and Emma as they travel to dolecetia. Feedback would be highly appreciated.

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TMVore

Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report

I'm a chaos writer, So, take my comments with a grain of salt.

I missed Emma, this story was set up perfectly for betrayal, bidding, Emma wins but has her cooked

Restaurant, Emma bought a special cut.

Both missed chances in my mind.

Other than that, great story. You're far better than me in so many ways.

ineedallaccs

Posted by ineedallaccs 1 year ago Report

I considered bringing her back for a betrayal but ultimately decided to focus on Amy. Maybe ill make a sequel about what happened to her.

Really appreciate the feedback although I wouldn't agree I'm better than anyone.

blueblue124

Posted by blueblue124 1 year ago Report

<3 Getting cooked up on vacation is like my number 1 fantasy, absolutely adored this.

ineedallaccs

Posted by ineedallaccs 1 year ago Report

Glad you enjoyed it, hopefully more to come soon

emikochan

Posted by emikochan 1 year ago Report

amazingly well written, I loved this :D

ineedallaccs

Posted by ineedallaccs 1 year ago Report

Thank you very much for the kind words