Nice story. I like the amount of detail put in, just enough so the reader can paint a clear picture to what's going on. Only thing I'd suggest is put in some emotion with the thug, maybe have him wish he never got into that life if he knew that would happen. Either then that, it's a good read.
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Posted by CanisLupisVulpe 20 years ago Report
Nice story. I like the amount of detail put in, just enough so the reader can paint a clear picture to what's going on. Only thing I'd suggest is put in some emotion with the thug, maybe have him wish he never got into that life if he knew that would happen. Either then that, it's a good read.