Posted by carrierheart 9 months ago Report

Love this casual and uncaring vibe, would love to see more of it.

Posted by ObsidianSnake 9 months ago Report

Thanks!

Posted by VincentShadowScale 9 months ago Report

always love casual mass vore, I'd be a hella fatass in this setting >w>

Posted by ObsidianSnake 9 months ago Report

I wouldn't want to be in this setting at all myself, but I love your enthusiasm!

Posted by VincentShadowScale 9 months ago Report

heh can't help being vorny to eat a crowd of people for breakfast >w>

Posted by Mourtzouphlos 9 months ago Report

Goddamnit. You announce an indefinite hiatus and then you drop something like this? You are such a tease. I don't suppose you've still got some more waiting to upload in another batch, do you?

I might have mentioned this before, but I'm very interested in societal organization, and you do that very well, and it shows here. There's a clear sense of hierarchy (at least five ranks mentioned) as well as an incentive structure to fall in line and not rock the boat (you'll rank up and get more privileges) and a consistent internal justification (run the risks now, reap the rewards later).

The bit about clothes was interesting: why would wearing more clothes become more indecent over time? The digestable, flavorless fabric is likely relatively new, and would make it more convenient for the predators for prey to wear clothes, while the picture implies there's a rank aspect to it: prey have to be ready to always be eaten, but they act as if a predator wearing such a thing would be frowned upon today.

The entire plot is also suffused with a sense of deference towards the elders and apathy towards any contraindications. The justification given is that she has to attend the town hall meeting, and doesn't have time to get another meal, but then at the end she has plenty of time, and she doesn't actually plan on doing anything there, just sitting off to the side and knitting. The staff had to have actively planned for this to happen - a single hallway with no other exits, locking the door to the auditorium immediately after the last students left and then unlocking it after she was done, the front doors locked and programmed only to open for her - yet despite destroying everything they'd worked for over the past four years in a way that can't be called anything but deliberate, premeditated killing, they don't seem bothered at all. It's even implied that their parents knew about it as well, yet everyone still shows up to the graduation despite the pointlessness of it all, apparently solely because she wanted it to go that way.

Two last notes: is the name Fallowfield a hint? She donated the land, and is involved in the school, whose classes have been getting bigger. Did she let her fields go fallow in order to be more productive later on? Is she still a farmer, just of prey?
The last couple of lines: "It made her and others happy, and that's what's important." Brilliant summation of the worldview: all that matters is what the elders want. The bit just before that though, is more subtle, but also interesting. It read to me as something like "The chancellor was well aware of the king's policies, and was equally aware of the penalties for disobeying his orders, but always made sure to keep the king fully informed of all the details, so that if he ever did have to make a decision, the king would see to it that he made the correct one, or would at least find it difficult to pin the blame on him." The seniors after all, may be quite old, but they aren't yet full elders.

Posted by ObsidianSnake 9 months ago Report

Solid observation on the name of the locale. If this text field supported full unicode you'd be looking at a gold star here.

Sadly, for now, I am batch-less. I got no batches. :C But that's okay. I'm still interested in writing, just exploring other stuff right now.

Knowing that there's enough sickos genuinely excited ha-ha Yes! YES! for the kind of thing the Chronea setting does is HoRRIfING and also motivating. Obviously, I had grouped some other story concepts with this one, and now I can be assured that there's audience interest in them.

Anyway, I can't leave this site. Everyone here is so fucked up -- I always feel at home :)

Posted by Randomness 4 months ago Report

This was great!