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With Zoe's disappearance weighing heavily on her mind, her best friend, Claire, takes it upon herself to find out what happened. Unfortunately for her, Lilith doesn't take too kindly to accusations.
Longest story so far, couple more things buried in here that I hope some of you appreciate. I got bogged down with some commission work for other stuff and have been skimping on this lately, so it's finally here! Hope it was worth it haha.
Comments are always welcome. Constructive criticism, suggestions or even just showing some love, anything is appreciated. Seriously, anything you have to say, I want to hear, I encourage it!
Thumbnail is AI generated because, surprise surprise, I'm still broke as all hell.
Cheers everyone.
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Posted by Discordance 9 months ago Report
Brilliant
Posted by DocClamor 9 months ago Report
Hey! Appreciate that haha, we get one every so often.
Posted by AnAccount 9 months ago Report
You really were cooking
Posted by DocClamor 9 months ago Report
I felt this one was certainly better than my previous stuff in some regards, a couple spot I’m unhappy with but overall I think it’s an improvement. Hoping to keep going and get more inventive with it. Cheers.
Posted by Grec0R0man 9 months ago Report
Heheh, Zettie is quite the fantastic, albeit very reluctant and remorseful, pred ;)
Posted by DocClamor 9 months ago Report
Yessir, ultimately, my goal is to try and make each scenario or pred as different from the last as possible. Thought it would add an extra layer of “fucked up” if it was someone who had good intentions and it didn’t pay off anyways haha.
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Yesss, a sequel to my favorite story of yours!
There was some good stuff in here, especially the bit where Lilith "used" Claire in her room, that was probably my favorite part.
I did think for a bit there that when Lilith and Zettie were fighting and Lilith shoved Claire into her own mouth that maybe she was going to pin Zettie down and forcefully make out with her, shoving Claire down her throat with her tongue...which would have been insanely hot. Still, the ultimate action was still good stuff, though I was surprised Lilith was so confident that Zettie wouldn't be able to induce vomiting, when she started to form her plan I thought she might just keep Zettie pinned until she was sure Claire was too digested to be saved. I guess it worked out for her in the end so it doesn't matter though.
Seems like you're setting up for another sequel to this, and I'm excited to read it when you do!
Posted by DocClamor 9 months ago Report
I honestly contemplated that exact scenario with the forced make out haha, I just couldn't get it to sound right. Perhaps another time. ;-) As for her confidence, that was really the reason I had her hang out for as long as she did, I probably should've expanded on that bit, she was supposed to be there until it looked like Zettie had pretty much given up, spirits broken sort of thing. Unfortunately, I feel I rushed some parts and they need a bit of work but I'm overall relatively happy with how it came out. I appreciate the comment and the suggestions good sir, thank you. :D
Posted by TinyHunter 9 months ago Report
Yeah, I definitely know how that can be...towards the end of a story I almost always just want it to be done and finished and I tend to rush a bit more myself.
Again, overall it was still great and I enjoyed it, those were just the bits that stood out :P
Posted by zargein 9 months ago Report
The bitch must die!
Posted by DocClamor 9 months ago Report
Haha, who knows what’s going to happen? ;-)
Posted by Gapemaw 8 months ago Report
Excellent
Posted by DocClamor 8 months ago Report
Hey, that's high praise from one of my favorite's on the site. I appreciate that man, thanks. :D
Posted by Gapemaw 7 months ago Report
Hahaha, I guess you never know
I appreciate your appreciation. I've got a bunch of projects in different states of completion... I need to get something out.