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Continuing on from my last story, let's see how Brenda the Paladin Against the Wyrm does on her first mission.

I wasn't actually sure whether I'd show this when I set it up last time. But I was struck by inspiration.

Fans of Lexa will be disappointed, but she'll be taking the next story.

Keep an eye out for a sly (probably not) reference.

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IddlerItaler

Posted by IddlerItaler 8 months ago Report

The hooded kobolds were cute!

"And the word that a famous playwright had managed to sell copies of his latest masterpiece, “The Tragedy of Ira the Squire,”"

Pffft, is that the reference? I'm flattered. Also the weredorf, kinda.

The slime sounds like the most fun character so far. Must've gotten up to all sort of shenanigans as a celestial's sidekick. Lol at how Brenda became way more willing to work with them once they took on a cute slimegirl form.

MasterGryph

Posted by MasterGryph 8 months ago Report

They needed some way to protect their eyes during the day.

Yep. Names and actions were kept the same, though Tonalnan was made a dragon instead of a couatl and both surviving characters were given a closing speech wildly at odds with what they actually said.
If the inspirations saw the play, they would definitely notice a message directed at them in particular. (And Tonalnan could recognize Musidora's signature style.)

What did you notice about the dwarf? I think I might have not read that one.


Yeah, Brenda still has clear biases. Although, she was also figuring it would make the mayor more inclined to listen.

IddlerItaler

Posted by IddlerItaler 8 months ago Report

There is a bit of irony in changing her from a giantess into a dragon considering the elder rivalry between the two that got mentioned, but Tonalnan wouldn't find the choice entirely unfitting.

Ah, the dwarf is probably just a possible inspiration, but you commented on one of my stories which featured werebear dwarves.

MasterGryph

Posted by MasterGryph 8 months ago Report

Oh right. I'd forgotten about them with everything else that happened in that story.

Eldachoon

Posted by Eldachoon 8 months ago Report

One wonders what ultimately became of honey

MasterGryph

Posted by MasterGryph 8 months ago Report

Originally I planned on having the chapter go further into the next morning and the report to the mayor. Honey wasn't present and a line from the mayor after Brenda leaves indicated that she was under the impression that Honey had joined Ori on the delivery job (which Brenda had not mentioned she had taken on) and gotten eaten by the Armorer before the paladin's coincidental arrival.

Then the chapter would end on a flashback to Honey and Ori having a mutual orgasm in their halfway eating position, and Honey getting accidentally swallowed and digested before Ori recovered. Ori would reflect that he should practice suppressing digestion so that kind of thing didn't happen again.

Since I didn't bother writing that into the chapter, I'm not saying that actually happened. with any luck, the two of them manage to have a long-term relation instead.

Eldachoon

Posted by Eldachoon 8 months ago Report

Well, either could have happened