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P.A.L.D.E.A. Ch. 20: Power's Peristalsis By Fatedmeal -- Report

misunderstanding that currently has Juliana in fatal danger. Underneath Galar Gym Leader Melony’s muffling lard and within her burning guts. Meanwhile, an event unfolds in the background. Who will live and who will perish?

Disclaimer: This is a long story. Below the references in this description I placed a Table of Contents to show how many pages are devoted to each section. Please use these for reference if you want to pace yourselves while reading the story.

Word Count: 43,860 words

Author’s Notes: This chapter has been a long time coming and has been delayed quite a bit. I apologize for that. To assuage any worries that you might have, my love for this series has not decreased in any way. I just wanted to be sure that I was in top-form before I tackled writhing the Season 2 Finale of the P.A.L.D.E.A. Series. I hope the amount of references, to media that I have consumed over the years, was not overly gratuitous.

Please let me know what you think of the story in the comments below.

Character References:
1. Right click on link and press open link in new tab.
2. Copy the link and paste it onto a new tab.
3. Don’t know what to tell you, you have to type in the character’s name and franchise in the search bar and find the image yourself.
Cogita: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Cogita#/media/File%3ALegends_Arceus_Cogita.png
Melony: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Melony#/media/File%3ASword_Shield_Melony.png
Juliana: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Juliana_(game)#/media/File%3AScarlet_Female_Trainer.png
Ace Trainer (Hoenn): https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Ace_Trainer_(Trainer_class)#/media/File%3AORAS_Ace_Trainer_F.png
Delinquent (Hoenn): https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Delinquent_(Trainer_class)#/media/File%3AORAS_Delinquent.png
Miraidon: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Miraidon_(Pokémon)#/media/File%3A1008Miraidon_Dream_5.png
Giacomo: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Giacomo#/media/File%3AScarlet_Violet_Giacomo.png
Geeta: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Geeta#/media/File%3AScarlet_Violet_Geeta.png
Lusamine: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Lusamine#/media/File%3ASun_Moon_Lusamine.png
Florian: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Florian_(game)#/media/File%3AViolet_Male_Trainer.png
Arezu/Zoroark: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Arezu#/media/File%3ALegends_Arceus_Arezu.png
Lapras: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Lapras_(Pokémon)#/media/File%3A0131Lapras.png
Anabel: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Anabel#/media/File%3AAnabel_SM_concept_art.png
Ryme: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Ryme#/media/File%3AScarlet_Violet_Ryme.png
Palina/Zoroark: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Palina#/media/File%3ALegends_Arceus_Palina.png
Hisuian Zoroark: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Zoroark_(Pokémon)#/media/File%3A0571Zoroark-Hisui.png
Silvally: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Silvally_(Pokémon)#/media/File%3A0773Silvally.png
Gladion: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Gladion#/media/File%3ASun_Moon_Gladion.png
Lillie: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Lillie#/media/File%3AUSUM_Lillie.png
Lunala (Nebby): https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Lunala_(Pokémon)#/media/File%3A0792Lunala.png
Arven: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Arven#/media/File%3AViolet_Arven.png
Emma: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Emma#/media/File%3AEmma_PG.png
Penny: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Penny#/media/File%3AScarlet_Violet_Penny.png
Mai/Zoroark: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Mai#/media/File%3ALegends_Arceus_Mai.png

Thumbnail Reference: https://gelbooru.com/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=6922613&tags=arezu_%28pokemon%29+solo+looking_at_viewer+-looking_down+

Table of Contents:

Prologue: When they Cry: 2 pages
Part I: Falling Short of the Truth: 18 pages
Part II: Not Even Darkness Can Escape Its End: 23 pages
Part III:How Many Lives We L.A.M.E.N.T. 26 pages
Part IV: As Above so Below 30 pages
Epilogue: Hunger Continues 5 pages

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SSV

Posted by SSV 8 months ago Report

Now that was worth the 3 month wait! It was getting pretty bad for the twin but I’m happy everything turned out alright..well..almost everything, rip Giacomo, you shall be missed.

The fight scenes was really written well! I was not expecting to see Lusamine and her kids, but you did a great job bringing them in. Always great to see Florian standing up for himself.

Can’t wait to see what you do next! Oh and this is a long shot, but is Lucas, you know, still around? He’s one of my favourite so just seeing if you have anything about that but I won’t be sad if you don’t.

Fatedmeal

Posted by Fatedmeal 8 months ago Report

Yea. Sentiments are definitely shared about the satisfaction I had with this piece coming out. It was definitely “touch-and-go” for our protagonists in this chapter. Probably the highest the stakes have been in the series so far, so I’m glad that this story was able to naturally build the tension to that point.

Also yea…I’ll definitely miss Giacomo as well. He’s my second favorite out of the Team Star Squad Bosses.

I’m glad that the combat writing was well received. I was worried if it would be disengaging since this is a Vore Story on a Vore site. However, I had to give the few fight and beatdown scenes in this chapter the proper attention they deserved. Whether it was a quick bout, a fight so one-sided it was off-screened, a battle between one exceptionally strong, and a duel between those of near-equal strengths…they all deserved the proper amount of details to deliver the relative weight of each scene.

I’m glad that Lusamine and her family came as an organic surprise. I had pretty much just mentioned Team L.A.M.E.N.T. only once so far in Chapter 16. So I was worried about the reception of the appearance of the Aether Foundation’s Matriarch. As, it is implied in the story, this family will end up being an integral part of the story going forward.

Yea…I’m afraid that I haven’t really let Florian have many opportunities to stand up for himself in this story. It will still be a rocky road ahead for him, as his one offensive ability so far is similar to Deku from Boku no Hero Academia (more reckless and with higher drawbacks than a recoil move) and comes at a steep cost of forward payment in terms of injury. Regardless, as of now, I think it positions Florian as an increasingly unique presence in this story. One that I will be excited to see develop in the next P.A.L.D.E.A. Season.

As for the question about Lucas…I haven’t really given any thought about him in my current roadmap for the first 40 chapters of this series. At the very least, you can be relaxed in that I haven’t designated him as having already experienced a fatal fate and being written out of the story (and I don’t think I’ll be doing that either as cutting too many distant threads would be troubling for me in the long run). Especially post-chapter 40 where things are more nebulous.

Dongers

Posted by Dongers 8 months ago Report

Holy hell... Reading this is going to take a while.

Fatedmeal

Posted by Fatedmeal 8 months ago Report

Writing all of this definitely took a long time for me as well. Regardless, I hope you enjoy every moment of it.

Edddd

Posted by Edddd 8 months ago Report




I had been patiently looking forward to this and it didnt disappoint ^^

The entire Giacomo arc was full of twists and turns too, almost as many as Lusamine's guts that claimed him, hope he's getting the rest he dreamed of as a micro layer on her.

I must say I really wanted Arezuark to win but sadly the show must go on and that would be difficult indeed with Florians spirit absorbed and his body turned to Arezu-mud :P

Glad shes still kicking and feasting though!


Really nice overall, I dont visit here too often anymore but I always make sure to check your page <3

Fatedmeal

Posted by Fatedmeal 8 months ago Report

Thanks a bunch for allotting the time to comment on the Season 2 Finale. I'm super glad that you enjoyed Giacomo's arc in P.A.L.D.E.A. I actually planned on ending his arc along with another back in my original idea for Chapter 10 (Season 1 Finale)...but my initial conception of that story had changed a lot when I finally reached this point.

However, now my ideas and roadmap are much more solidified...so I don't there will be many changes going forward aside from chapter titles (whatever I think sounds good).

Yea...I'm super glad that Zoroark has been a fan favorite for a couple people. As this isn't the last that we'll be seeing of her.

Just, as I'm guessing, that you are looking forward to the next chapter...so too am I looking forward to your next comment. Until next time!

Edddd

Posted by Edddd 8 months ago Report

Oh indeed I'm looking forward to it with bated breath and practiced patience :) til then