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"This isn't today's Linktober story!" you cry in disbelief.
Indeed, it is not, dear reader. Today is also my friend SmaxTheDestroyer's birthday! He also goes by the alias SuperSaiyainSlytherin, and he wanted a story of the Shani bounty hunter Deva Lompop from Star Wars eating him. Fun fact, Deva can canonically swallow people whole, so the non-canon part of this story is the fact that Slytherin appears in it. Since it's a Star Wars story, and I'm a huge Star Wars fan, I also hid a few references throughout, though there's one set of lines that's an Easter Egg I'm proud of. Happy birthday Slytherin! Enjoy being Shani poo, I guess lol
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 7 months ago Report
Thanks a ton for the birthday gift! It really means a lot! :-)
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Posted by ZeldaNoVorsu 7 months ago Report
You're welcome :)
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Posted by WoreHouse 7 months ago Report
I was surprised that there is such a good character in the Star Wars canon. Now I have another vore-crash from this universe, in addition to the rancors and the sarlacc, kek
About the story itself - overall it is well written, it was a pleasure to read. The only thing that upsets me a little is the small size - I would like a better disclosure of the willingness of the prey (Playful communication, teasing and all that), as well as a more detailed description of digestion. I think inside the stomach of this gluttonous lizard it was very cramped, humid, powerful and hot acids were everywhere, and the smell was probably just awful there... in general, this is a delightful place that I would like to feel better, heh.
But since this is a commission, I understand that most likely there was a request for this size (Well, or since it’s a gift it shouldn’t be too big, right?), so this probably cannot be called a minus. So overall, for its size, the story is very good!
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