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Kim's night starts out like any other but ends in a splash.
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Posted by RangerCV 3 months ago Report
Always open to criticism. Is there anything I should focus on improving?
Posted by SeismicOverlord 3 months ago Report
Love the casual nature of this, especially in the narration with lines like "Kim's ass slide into where it belonged", and also love some of the vore-centric synonyms like 'Girl churner'.
Only criticisms I have are wanting an establishing shot so I could get a better image in my head before Kim became cum, as well as a longer digestion sequence since that's my fav part... besides that I love the short and sweet nature of this though, great work~!
Posted by Ruler101 3 months ago Report
Overall pretty nice. I also love the casual tone, and despite its short length it flows pretty well. If there’s anything to critique, you could be a bit more descriptive of the characters, and possibly the digestion. But those are pretty minor complaints