I must say nice job but maybe you should make a alternative ending to this story like Yoko and Jenny go out and Yoko helps raise jenny's two children that she unbirthed. Though Rudi was still eaten by Yoko but Yoko ended up going out with Jenny instead of eating her.
You're not the first to say i should write an alternate ending, i have no plans on writing one but who know's what the future holds. I'm more focused on the sequel at the moment
GREAT STORY!! I was bit sad that Yoko ate Rudi. I thought she might have held him in her womb as a safety precaution or so so that Jenny didnt try to eat her or so. This was still an excellent story. Will there be another to follow this?
It's very unlikely i'm afraid, it was written so long ago that i don't think i'll ever make a sequel. One was in the works but i lost the file and sadly the enthusiasm as well.
Posted by Gypa 17 years ago Report
Nice story.
Posted by ShadowInukara 16 years ago Report
I must say nice job but maybe you should make a alternative ending to this story like Yoko and Jenny go out and Yoko helps raise jenny's two children that she unbirthed. Though Rudi was still eaten by Yoko but Yoko ended up going out with Jenny instead of eating her.
Posted by Entity 16 years ago Report
You're not the first to say i should write an alternate ending, i have no plans on writing one but who know's what the future holds. I'm more focused on the sequel at the moment
Posted by keyblademark 15 years ago Report
there is a secuel??? :O
Posted by Entity 15 years ago Report
It's being written but it's not my primary objective.
Posted by keyblademark 15 years ago Report
I see :)
Posted by ShadowInukara 16 years ago Report
Sounds good can't wait to read the sequal to this story.
Posted by keyblademark 15 years ago Report
this was really good, and the end was even better, good work :)
Posted by Entity 15 years ago Report
Thanks, i think it needs to be rewritten though
Posted by keyblademark 15 years ago Report
i don't think so, it is just perfect :)
Posted by BiggerTheBetter 12 years ago Report
Think I would have preferred it if Jenny ate them all. Giving a sense of just deserts i suppose :D
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
Well twists aren't for everyone :)
Posted by BiggerTheBetter 12 years ago Report
Love twists, just seemed like they had it coming lol. Brilliant story tho. Congrats
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
Thanks :)
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
Awesome story, dude
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
thank you :)
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
No prob. *tastes yoko*
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
careful,she bites.
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
Can u ask her to let me stay alive in her belly?
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
I don't think that's gonna happen. not with Yoko ;)
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
Then her boobs?
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
same answer XD
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
A nite with her at least?
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
It'll all end the same way, she's a pred plain and simple.
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
Hard to read red against black
Posted by Entity 12 years ago Report
It should actually be very easy to read
Posted by almindore58 12 years ago Report
Ok, got it now, just gotta zoom in
Posted by KrasnyiKoiot 10 years ago Report
Always enjoyed this one! Surprised I hadn't favorited it sooner. n.n
Posted by Entity 10 years ago Report
Well thank you for doing so ^^
Posted by mallowsal 10 years ago Report
should do an alternate where rudi eats yoko XDXD
Posted by Entity 10 years ago Report
I don't see that happening XD
Posted by mallowsal 10 years ago Report
awwww XDXD
Posted by Darkwarrior676 8 years ago Report
GREAT STORY!! I was bit sad that Yoko ate Rudi. I thought she might have held him in her womb as a safety precaution or so so that Jenny didnt try to eat her or so. This was still an excellent story. Will there be another to follow this?
Posted by Entity 8 years ago Report
It's very unlikely i'm afraid, it was written so long ago that i don't think i'll ever make a sequel. One was in the works but i lost the file and sadly the enthusiasm as well.
Posted by Darkwarrior676 8 years ago Report
Aww not a problem. Still I do look forward to your next story whenever it may be written.
Posted by Arrogancy 7 years ago Report
That's very sad to hear. This is one of my favorite stories on this site and has been for a long time.
Posted by Entity 7 years ago Report
Well i'm glad it's so well liked. :)
Posted by Bobrocks 5 years ago Report
Was not expecting that at all. Mainly Yoko liking Jenny and eating both Rudi and Jenny.
Posted by Bobrocks 5 years ago Report
Was not expecting that at all. Mainly Yoko liking Jenny and eating both Rudi and Jenny.
Posted by Bobrocks 5 years ago Report
Was not expecting that at all. Mainly Yoko liking Jenny and eating both Rudi and Jenny.
Posted by doomed 4 months ago Report
Damn do you know how hard it was to find this story again
Posted by Entity 4 months ago Report
I guess it left an impression whwn you first found it ^^;
Posted by doomed 4 months ago Report
Absolutely , I wish it had gotten a sequel or an alternate ending but yep I saw it here and on deviantart
Posted by Entity 4 months ago Report
If i get time i may rewrite and update it~