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An idea I had one night while in bed. Jan, an anthro fox, worries that her relationship may be failing. She comes ot the decision that there is only one thing she can do about it.
Contains: F/M, sex, soft vore, implied digestion, furry, and a small twist of an ending.
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Posted by Surreal_Serenity 17 years ago Report
Double check every time you use a word processors spell check. I noticed a few "spelling" errors that are completely impossible for a living person to make.
Sexually, this isn't terribly exciting. The detail and character development a bit lacking during your vore/sex scenes, which, when mixed, help make the best sorts of those scenes. However, I have to give you credit for your execution of the plot. The story was not very long, but the plot concept is classic and heart warming in it's own way.
What really caught my attention is that you had something from the beginning of the story effect the end of the story, namely, the gray wolf. Now, from your perspective you may not be seeing what is so impressive about that. Looking at professional work, it's easy to see why. However, since I've seen a lot of stories on the internet, I can say that it's actually quite rare here. This means that you pay more attention to detail about plot and whatnot than is typically seen, and that is a good thing.
As for your characters, I can't say that I've left this story with a good idea of who they are and what they are like. Perhaps in your sequel you can experiment with how they act and behave in different situations to fully display their personalities.
All in all, I'd say this story was well constructed. This is above normal for what I usually read, especially since I mostly prefer fantasy/sci-fi stories. I normally would have stopped reading after a few paragraphs if I didn't notice any "real, promising ability" present in those initial moments. However, you succeeded in making a story that I could enjoy reading from start to finish: I not only read it, but I don't regret reading it, and I'm a picky person.
In fact, I'm going to check around your archives for anything else of yours =D
Posted by Eka 17 years ago Report
Nice commenting there Surreal_serenity
Posted by BerserkerB 17 years ago Report
I'll have to look back for those spelling errors. I was not using my word processor, and I did not have my usual dictionary with me. Thanks for the comment, and I will try and rework the detail in my sex scenes.