Posted by MrNobody 14 years ago Report

Katamari Damacy!

Posted by PrinnyDood 14 years ago Report

Haha, that's right! I was wondering if anyone would get that reference. :D

Posted by Lum_the_mad 14 years ago Report

I thought you might enjoy a slightly longer review, so here it is, please feel free to skip parts if you think I'm rambling. You know, a thing I think I like about your vore stories in Felarya, there's always a chance that one or two of your little adventurers do get away. Your grammar and punctuation were very good, and there were few typos. Your characters seemed to have decent characterization, more so your dryad, your fairy, despite their slightly less screen time, and potentially your first adventuress. From what I've noticed your humans (and the Neko) in this particular story are a little too busy fighting for their lives, or being eaten, to really have much time for characterization. Which is fine since most of them end up being eaten anyway, but I'm a man who's obsessed with his characters really. This story in my opinion was very good as far as being action packed goes, but not quite as much with the sexy voreishness. It was still good, but to me it seemed a lot more soft-core than your norm. Maybe it was just because your victims just weren't quite as naked as they could be? All in all I really think this is pretty darn good, but the vore seemed much more like a seasoning than the main theme. Which surprises me for a Felaryan vore story, but still makes a good read. Quite thrilling though, I can really get a feel for your dark stormy Felarya night, with a hungry naga and other man eating beasties on the loose. Keep up the good work my friend.

Posted by PrinnyDood 14 years ago Report

Thank you, thoughtful and detailed feedback is something I value greatly! :)

So yeah, I rather do like to keep the reader guessing as to the fate of the characters, especially in my stories set in Felarya; for some reason I tend to put the story at least a little ahead of the sexy voreishness there, as you noticed, as opposed to my random settingless stuff. I love unique fantasy settings, even totally removed from vore, so I wander from the topic sometimes. I've done a couple that are completely vore-free, in fact, though I haven't uploaded them here at Eka's. Dunno if I should, not everybody reads tags, and I hate disappointing people.

You are right in that most of the human characters, especially the three nameless doomed ones in the cage with Sheena, got a little shortchanged in the characterization department, but hopefully I'll get better at giving some personality to my characters, even when they don't get much time between introduction and being gobbled up. :3

In any case, thank you very much for the feedback. This is the sort of thing that inspires me to improve, and keep writing these.

Posted by Lum_the_mad 14 years ago Report

I'm just glad you appreciate it! A lot of people don't take any form of critiquing well, even if I point out the parts that are really good. I must admit it's rather refreshing not having someone freak out at me. I hope to get around to reading all your vore short stories eventually, because they're really good. It's the kind of style of writing I have for my stories, so I find them inspiring too. So I may have to review a few more of the short stories I read of yours that I particularly like.

Posted by PrinnyDood 14 years ago Report

Heh, I'm definitely not the 'freak out over criticism' type. I'd honestly much rather someone say 'this is bad' and then explain why, than say nothing at all.

Feedback is how I can improve, and as much as I like the simple 'good job' comments, they are far less legitimately helpful than the ones that go into detail, regardless of whether the overall impression was positive or negative.

So yeah, criticize away! ^_^