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Chapter one of a story focusing around the Thirteenth Legion officer Isadora. Mostly backstory and an introduction to three of the main characters
Posted by Kuja 14 years ago Report
I really do love the introduction, while I do believe Ran could have shown abit more skepticism since she had never met Isadora at first there reaction was very well played out but considering Laylas position I wonder why Ran didnt kill her first considering she would likely be a future threat. (( Although Ran didnt have much of a choice since she had already slain the royal family.)) As for Layla her transformation was delightfully frightening from beginning to end. I think my personal favorite part is during the detailed description of the living conditions of the Felgonians, It really brought with it a disheartening and woeful feeling.