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Blame Bittersweet. I was commissioned.
...The commissioner said they couldn't clop to it because they thought it was too cute.
Princess Luna visits Ponyville before the Winter Moon Celebration, and meets with the Elements of Harmony, One at a time...
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Posted by SirScotty 13 years ago Report
Gotta admit, I saw this and was thinking "oh no, not MLP!"
But then I read it, and it wasn't horrible in any way shape or form. Good show!
Posted by TristanHawthorne 13 years ago Report
I've had more inspiring comments than "not horrible" before.
Any other insights?
Posted by SirScotty 13 years ago Report
Sorry about that, I realized after the fact that it could have sounded better. :P
I actually really emjoyed the whole thing. Normally I'm put off by lack of explicit vore, but that wasn't the case here, as it was well written enough that the rest of the story more than made up for it.
Major points for keeping the characters consistent with the show. Reading it, I coulf fairly hear them talking, particularly Pinkie, which I couldn't help but laugh at.
All in all, a very good read.
Posted by TristanHawthorne 13 years ago Report
I tend to prefer preserving some level of discretion leading to a reveal. In addition, the choice to have the Mane Six not know what was going on, and to have each vignette from their third person limited perspectives caused only Pinkie Pie's and Luna's views to have explicit descriptions of nomming.
That and since I'm more interested in male on male myself, I decided to stay sensual and stay away from sexual (even if I find vore inherently sexual)
Posted by SirScotty 13 years ago Report
I think lack of sexual content is a bonus in this instance. The major appeal (at least, to me) of the characters and the situations they get into is that it's "cute." Sexualizing it would pretty much destroy that unless you went to GREAT pains to avoid it, and at that point I don't think it'd even be worth doing.
Like it is though, you captured that feeling of cute almost perfectly. Definitely gets a stamp of approval.
Posted by unicorn 13 years ago Report
Awesome, pony vore <3 We can always use more of this. And Luna is one of my favourite characters, so it's nice to see this story revolving around her.
Posted by Bittersweet 13 years ago Report
As always a fantastic job. I really love how this turned out and you did a wonderful job keeping it within the spirit of the show and making it cute and cuddly.
Posted by Hermlover21 13 years ago Report
I am not usually one for anything but humans, but i absolutely love this show, and this story was amazing! So sweet!
Posted by emalee 13 years ago Report
I can't clip to this Dx
Posted by emalee 13 years ago Report
*Clop
Posted by Kirah 12 years ago Report
This is definitely an awesome story. One of the few out there which don't feature horribly graphic digestion.
Posted by TristanHawthorne 12 years ago Report
Graphic Digestion is one of my turn-offs, along with gore, violence, and cruelty.
Posted by Kirah 12 years ago Report
Guess that explains a lot. By the way, the tags imply that there's some sort of digestion going on, but the story seems to suggest otherwise. I know that Luna absorbed the power of the Elements, but what really happened to the Mane Six, though?
Posted by Kirah 12 years ago Report
Never mind, figured it out. Maybe I should actually read the last few lines of the story, instead of me accidentally thinking I already read that.
Posted by TristanHawthorne 12 years ago Report
Reformation was also one of the tags :P
Posted by Shirehorse7 11 years ago Report
Nice story i like Luna she's awesome