Posted by noisekeeper 13 years ago Report

To be honest, I kind of like that aspect of vore. That a pred's hunger can be so great that it overwhelms their common sense. Though I do wonder how she will pay all those bills while being in hibernation.

Posted by PimpDaddyPichu 13 years ago Report

Aha, that's where the consequences of her voracious actions kick in~

The thing is, she won't be able to get to them since she'll be knocked out cold for, what, 3 1/2 months? Shizuka may have had the pleasure of having a full belly now, but it's gonna get worse once she wakes up and has to deal with the mountain of chores/bills that Yohachi and Fuyuko usually did for her.

Posted by fatass 13 years ago Report

This is a really well written story! I love it

Posted by PimpDaddyPichu 13 years ago Report

Save for a few mistakes here and there but, I'm glad you liked it~

Posted by Decimos 13 years ago Report

Really awesome read, and I need to express that thoroughly before becoming even slightly critical, particularly about such a subjective point. I'd of liked Shizuka to seem a little more guilty about the way things played out - I mean, if she was Fuyuko's best friend it had to of been somewhat mutual? It felt a little alien to have her so ready to shrug off the consequence of taking their lives - though, I suppose that's something that may sink in more down the road. Of course, she is also something of a demon I suppose...guilt isn't always a good topping for vore oriented reading anyhow. To come back full circle, I still wholly enjoyed it.

Posted by PimpDaddyPichu 13 years ago Report

Always like when folks pick my stuff apart, lets me know what I done right or wrong~

Anyways, onto the matter at hand; I know where you're coming from and yeah, reading back over it, it probably would have been a tad better for Shizuka to be a bit more 'impacted' by her essentially eating and killing them.

Part of the reason I overlooked this at first is because, as you mentioned, she's a demon and not only that a bear that's (supposed) to eat to pack on fat for the winter. It's basically a jab at something similar to how it's shown that animals tamed and raised in captivity can still be dangerous predators and can turn at the most unexpected of moments. Only in this story, it took the form of a chubby, bear girl :V

Hopefully this makes sense. I do like Shizuka's character though, so perhaps I'll write a sequel to this one showing how things turned out for her...