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Now we head to a military lab where, wouldn't ya know it, some oblivious child takes something she's not supposed to out a containment environment and opens it up....
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Posted by Mid_Night 12 years ago Report
Amazing that the way to go. Wonder what will happen next.
Posted by GUEST19216 12 years ago Report
my guess is that there is going to be some pissed off military groups looking for emily
Posted by Firstfate 12 years ago Report
hehehehe, not the military... exactly >.> but someone with a lot of power behind 'them' :D
Posted by Rhysion 12 years ago Report
Things seemed like they were off to what could be considered a good and fairly normal start I thought, but after about the time Alice went out to find a meal for Emily it just kinda got a bit ridiculous and keeping my suspension of disbelief got harder and harder as the events that happened felt like they were just arbitrarily happening.
I get that Emily does have wants and needs and is a curious and deviant creature, but all the telling instead of showing in the writing made the things she did feel like they lacked good cohesion and meaning. Still, I am curious to find out what the community is going to do once they realize ask the strange occurrences and people going missing.
Where are the men, by the way? Have they all been kidnapped and replaced by futamari perhaps?
Posted by Firstfate 12 years ago Report
As I said before I tend to focus more on the story rather than just the vore, so I apologize if I'm not as in-depth with my descriptions. I have trouble visualizing what I've never 'actually' seen before and with people who are just in the story to get eaten, I don't go to far into who they are they since they're just cannon fodder anyways.
As for where all the men went, the more you read my works the more you'll see that I base my stories on worlds where there are girls/ladies (typical females of modern society) and females/women (Ladies with cocks) because I prefer to imagine more feminine things when I'm writing. Cause would you want to think about some random male naked that you passed by in real life? I most certainly do not, so I make everything in *most* of my stories more feminine because that's the way I like think.
Posted by Rhysion 12 years ago Report
It's actually the story and plot that I really enjoy in stuff like this, not just vore or sex. When there's a lack of context and/or emotional connection between the reader and the characters' actions though, it can be harder to get interested in the tale. Finding a good balance between action, description, and narration is a challenging thing, and arguably the goal of any storyteller.
A world created with more of a personal choice to it then? There's nothing inherently wrong with that. Going into more depth about the setting and how they might work could be an interesting thing to tell about I think however. The story could benefit from a little more explanation of its setting, and doubly so if you can do it in a way that shows the reader instead of telling them as well.
For example, how would one of the characters in here talk to another that could explain to the reader the situation with everyone being the way they are? Is there something you can describe or narrate about the world that indicates that there are girls and women?
I like to read about all the strange and different things that make up fictional worlds that aren't our own, as well as their people. It's one of the biggest reasons I enjoy furry stuff as much as I do.
Posted by Firstfate 12 years ago Report
If I remember right, the world where this story is based has a heavy use of alchemy and overuse of scientific discovers by all of humanity to better human life, which is what leads to the sex change, but I think that is touched base on later in the story.... but I don't remember be cause of how long it's been since I have even looked at this story. So with that I urge you to keep reading :)